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By Jakkstarr
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06 July 2008 |
My first work, which I wrote just blissfully idling away the time, thinking about my house, imagining it as a peaceful place in a busy city.
As of any of my works, I welcome comments. Hope you like it!
Sitting aloft on a winding road, below a hill of evergreen
A weathered home of long-lost tome, known only few and far between
Cerulean sky with clouds on high to set a silver lining scene
Out front a rosy jubilee to contrast garden brown and green
Out back a row of tulips show – an oil painting; pink and cream
To round a shed of rusty red and a house of long forgotten dreams
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Cerulean!
Written by Katanga (1497 comments posted) 6th July 2008 | What a word to weave, seemingly effortlessly and seamlessly, into a poem!
I confess, I had to look it up. . .
Anyway, love the poem!
With your talent for rhythm and rhyme, I think you could do those complicated fiendish-form things, like 'villanelle', 'paradelle' 'rondeau' etc - see the work of Brett and NathanRoberts for examples - good discipline and good fun and great work!
Keep 'em coming!
John |
Written by Phil (6951 comments posted) 7th July 2008 | I liked the gentle rhythm of this. I think you achieved what you set out to do.
Phil |
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