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Poetry
The Letter (A Jack Vettriano Painting)
By Brett
09 July 2008
Thanks to a late review I found this had been erroneously posted in the shorts section. Doh!

What has she read in that one page of lines?
Perhaps the ending of a love affair,
Confessions of a husband's ardent crimes?
Could it be resignation or despair
That causes her to drop what may be rhymes
Of passion without peer, without compare?
In mourning is this reader? Or in bloom?
As supine as new love and as the tomb.

Or could it be that piece of paper's old,
Awakening the death of which she read -
Her own sweet child, her precious, uncontrolled
Dear soldier boy who never knew he bled?
How long could a mother's fingers hold
The leaf on which such haunting news is spread?
As to that leaf I am a blind voyeur,
And blind assuming it's addressed to her.

Could it not be written in her hand,
Confessing to affections not outgrown?
Does she regret or does she understand
The reasons why the letter was not shown?
Happiness, from her, has long been banned;
Mournful music now her chaperone.
In deep reflection is this once coquette;
Reflections slowly burn her cigarette.

Reviews
Simply Amazing!
Written by Katanga (1698 comments posted) 9th July 2008
I am awe-struck. 
 
I don't know the painting, or any of Jack Vettriano's work come to that, but I can kind of visualise it through your poem. 
 
So many killer lines here - particularly like: 
 
As supine as new love and as the tomb 
 
Dear soldier boy who never knew he bled 
 
Mournful music now her chaperone 
 
and many more. In fact I could simply quote the entire piece for lines that knock me sideways. 
 
Speechless! 
 
You should get yourself published, Brett, for all our sakes! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John
Superlative
Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 9th July 2008
A firm applause from me 
Take a bow Sir Brett 
:grin
Tremendous
Written by Robru (279 comments posted) 9th July 2008
I can only add to those before me. Please take a bow.
Keats' Grecian Urn...
Written by Veronica_Milvus (794 comments posted) 9th July 2008
was brought to mind by this. Same questioning attitude from the viewer as to the meaning of what he was seeing. I also loved "supine as new love or as the tomb". There's another poem in that analogy, somewhere. 
 
I will go and Google the painting. 
 
Great poem, 
V

Written by Turquoise-Tangerine (306 comments posted) 9th July 2008
No doubt inspired by 'The Letter', but don't you just love 'Round Midnight'? 
 
Some great lines in this, too many to quote here. 
 
Cheers, 
Turk.

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 9th July 2008
I'm not a fan of Vettriano, but this particular painting is one of his more intriguing ones. You picked up on the cigarette in that final line, which is a key point to the painting, I think - centred in the frame, also only just lit which indicates she's not asleep, the smoke rising up without a breeze...suggesting the tomb-like stillness.  
 
To me, the most interesting aspect of the painting is the painting within a painting - a cut off image of four silhoetted figures, standing in twilight. Also, the flowers seem significant...not sure what type of flower they are (white lillies? symbol of innocence, purity, resurrection?). 
 
Anyway, enough of the art critique! I thought this one was extremely well constructed with some wonderful rhyme and John has picked out some of the best lines.  
 
My only possible criticism might be that the questioning never really allows the reader to progress deeply into the possible scenarios, we're left outside of the image slightly, skirting the possibilities, rather than immersed in them. I'm trying to imagine what the poem would have been like if you'd taken the plunge and written it as if you knew exactly what had happened or had some insight the general public didn't? Or, maybe, another possible angle (more surreal), the narrators could have been the people in the painting on the woman's wall...perhaps they know part of the story.  
 
 

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3713 comments posted) 9th July 2008
Don't know the artist or the painting but I don't think it matters. I think you caught that fascination with a frozen act by an artist very succinctly and precisely. I have done the same thing myself when looking at photographs, inventing scenarios and asking questions, and I think I disagree with Brett; the questioning makes the poem as we don't really need to go into it in depth. It's just those fleeting questions that flit through your mind. I think you captured the whole thing so vividly and with a thoughtful elegance. 
jane
Ooops
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3713 comments posted) 9th July 2008
I meant I disagree with Nathan, That's the trouble with this anonymous type of networking it's just names and no faces 
hey-ho

Written by Josie (2945 comments posted) 9th July 2008
The lady in the painting looks dressed up and ready to go out for the evening, wearing her long white evening gown and white evening sandals. Perhaps she has just had a note popped through her door saying "Sorry, it's all over". You certainly have done well in bringing out many things to think about in this one picture Brett. Well done!

Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 9th July 2008
I think this is the painting if anyone wants a look: 
Click here 
 
Much been said about the poem - which I won't add to - other than I liked it very much. 
 
I was never much into art - except in the way that most people are - liking to look at a 'nice' picture. Never really thought about it until I read The History of the World in Ten and Half Chapters, which has a whole paragraph dedicated to one painting - Theodore Gericault's The Raft of the Medusa. Then read Heller's Picture This. Once you're shown a way into art, it becomes a whole different world. You start to look differently. Can't say I particularly like Vettriano, but the piece reveals a fascinating train of thought that illustrates the power of visual imagery. 
 
Enjoyed very much. 
 
Phil

Written by stevetroster (1618 comments posted) 9th July 2008
Hi Brett. 
I have always been drawn towards art that allows its audience to form a personal opinion (Picasso, Dali, Ernst, Ray, Tanguy, among others). Personal interpretation is far removed from what Nathan is suggesting, although I can see that his idea of delving into the mystical world of a painting has some merit. 
 
Favourite lines: 
 
Mournful music now her chaperone. 
In deep reflection is this once coquette; reflections slowly burn her cigarette. 
 
All the best, 
Steve.

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 10th July 2008
Steve: 'I have always been drawn towards art that allows its audience to form a personal opinion .......Personal interpretation is far removed from what Nathan is suggesting,' 
 
What exactly do you think I was suggesting, other than a personal opinion?  
 
Also, what art doesn't allow it's audience to form a subjective opinion??! (In fact, I can't think of a single 'thing' that is entirely objective...it's ontologically impossible.) 
 
Although knowledge of an artist's (conscious) intentions or some other background info can add to an interpretation, it is still an interpretation. In this respect there are informed interpretations and uninformed ones. Neither is 'better' than the other, though one may be more inclusive, interesting or have a greater depth. 
 
All I was doing was offering one interpretation of the poem and the painting (in this case..pretty uninformed!).  
 
My comment about the 'insight the general public didn't have' was referring to the possibility of following the slightly surreal premise that the woman actually existed and knew about her predicament (entering into the world of the painting), or the possibilty that the poet/narrator knew something about that world, not a generalised comment about the public's understanding of art.
Thanks to all who took time to comment.
Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 10th July 2008
Tolstoy, Paula, Robru - very kind. Your good health. 
 
V - Grecian Urn - too much praise, thank you. 
 
Turk - I wonder why you like 'Rond midnight? Couldn't be that tattoo could it? 
 
Rob - Some interesting comments, just goes to show that no two writers are alike (thank Christ). Regarding 'we're left outside the image' - aren't we all when looking at a painting? Thanks. 
 
Jane - Thanks for both agreeing and disagreeing, that was the highlight of the thread! Much appreciated. 
 
Josie - She may also have just come in! 
 
Phil - My introduction to The Raft of the Medusa was not as high brow; The Pogues used it as the cover for Rum, Sodomy, and the Lash. 
 
Steve - Thanks for your comments, I won't go into them for Rob's sake! Appreciated very much. 
 
Cheers

Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 10th July 2008
Liked this a lot Brett. The only line that slightly jarred for me personally, was "Happiness, from her, has long been banned;" It somehow didn't quite fit in with the rest. Like most, I am not familiar with the artist or the painting either, but you've painted such a beautiful picture with your words, that it doesn't matter.  
 
Regards, 
TT
Great Thread!
Written by Katanga (1698 comments posted) 11th July 2008
Yes, this thread of reviews after such a magnificent poem makes fascinating reading. 
 
And Jane's 'agreeing and disagreeing' postings gave me the giggles! 
 
Cheers again! 
 
John

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 11th July 2008
Brett: 'Regarding 'we're left outside the image' - aren't we all when looking at a painting?' 
 
Gosh, no.  
 
I left large parts of my inner intestine in a Francis Bacon painting, and Pollock grabbed my left bollock (quite predictably). Picasso stole an eye or three and Van Gogh got my soul. I am currently renting a room inside a Roger Hilton painting.
Very sensitively written.
Written by applemuncher (39 comments posted) 12th September 2008
I have never been very good at drawing information out of artwork but your poem reviews this perfectly.  
 
I'm a bit ashamed to say that I've never seen that painting before until you posted the link but your poem allowed me to study the painting and by reading your poem at the same time allowed me to see what others see within the artwork. 
 
A job well done I think.
applemuncher
Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 14th September 2008
Thank you for your review (I can't take credit for posting up the link, that was the ever helpful Phil). 
 
Cheers

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