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Ha! Ha!
Written by Katanga (1698 comments posted) 9th July 2008 |
Very good - the idea of you 'bringing up the rear'.
However, I shall be behind you shortly with 'A Louche Scaramouch'.
Beware - best cover your ass!
Cheers!
Cheeky John |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3713 comments posted) 9th July 2008 |
It's just impossible to write a limerick and not make it sound smutty.
This perfectly suits the form
Very funny
jane |
Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 9th July 2008 |
Enjoyed, Nathan.
Phil |
Written by Josie (2945 comments posted) 9th July 2008 |
| Hello Nathan - Well, you haven't got the rhythm right for a limmerick, but the message got through. Well done! |
Nothing wrong with the rhythm!
Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 9th July 2008 |
Jesus, I thought limericks were supposed to be fun!
3 beats 1st line - 'think' 'through' 'interset'
3 beats 2nd line - '..void..' 'limer..' 'love-'
I'm sure the next two lines scan perfectly to anyone.
3 beats 5th line - 'comes' 'rear' 'cont..'
Cheers |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (794 comments posted) 9th July 2008 |
Perfect rhythm, I would say.
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Jesus?
Written by Katanga (1698 comments posted) 10th July 2008 |
I agree with you, Brett and Veronica, about the rhythm. Fine by me!
But one thing puzzles me - did Jesus write limericks?
I can't find a rhyme for 'Bethlehem' but I'm working on it!
Ha! Ha!
Cheers!
John |
Thanks all!
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 10th July 2008 |
Josie: How are you reading it? Brett's got it spot on. Two lines trimetre, two lines dimetre, one line trimetre. Is it that tiny 'a' before 'voided'...not strictly anapaestic? You're a harsh task master if it is!
John: But one thing puzzles me - did Jesus write limericks? He could've saved a lot of confusion if he'd swapped the parables for limericks. Good luck with Bethlehem...I can only get a rough 'stick it up them' (off the top of my head), which doesn't really fit the mood... |
Deathly Hem?
Written by Katanga (1698 comments posted) 10th July 2008 |
Will that do? I just need to work out how a hem can be deathly . . .
Hmmm!
Ha! Ha!
John |
Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 10th July 2008 |
Short and funny. Enjoyed!!
John: Bedlam?
Regards,
TT |
Jerusalem, not one of them, what a blood
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 11th July 2008 |
| Has he still not written it yet?! |
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 11th July 2008 |
'What a bloody gem', I was cut off...someone sending me a message? It's not exactly blasphemy...ooh how about blasphem, without the 'e'! Something about getting struck by lightning
on the way to Bethlehem
I started to blasphem
before i could 'e'
the lightning struck me
God, I'd love my beard back again!
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