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Another problem
By punchy
10 July 2008
Just a bit of sillyness!


I have a big dilemma
well the problem's big to me
This problem that I face right now
Just landed on my knee

I'm sitting in a garden
A garden filled with friends
I don't want them to see my fear
But how do I pretend
 
I'm terrified of insects
and this one has got hair
A stripey back, 3 large eyes
That quiver as they stare

I know it wants to hurt me
And it knows that I know
So should I let it kill me now
or put my fear on show

My friends will think I'm freaky
If I scream and flap about
I know I'll never live it down
I feel it coming out
 
My tummy it is tightening
I'm breathing triple speed
My head has gone all big and hot
This insect wants to feed
 
OH My God 'it's flown away
I'd better check around
It might be hovering above
Or lurking on the ground
 
I think I'm safe, it must have gone
And I am still alive
That's the closest I have come to death
How did I survive?
 
I lived a whole adventure
 My friends are unaware
The only proof I have to show
A puddle on my chair

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Much Enjoyed!
Written by Katanga (1698 comments posted) 10th July 2008
Nice one, Paula! 
 
A couple of slightly distarcting typos: 
 
Stanza seven, line one 'its' = 'it's' 
 
Stanza eight, line one 'must of gone' = 'must have gone' 
 
How did I survive? Worth a question mark? 
 
Sorry to nit-pick! Really like it! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 10th July 2008
What's wrong with silliness if it brings a smile? 
Like this Paula, a very unexpected close. Funny. 
Cheers

Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 10th July 2008
Anything that brings a smile it worth it's weight. 
 
Enjoyed. 
 
Phil

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