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Babble
By punchy
11 July 2008
I would like to point out that I love my daughter and do not really wish her to be quiet, well only sometimes!
 Inspired by a morning of non stop questions.
I can't come up with a final verse as i am worn out from the chat so feel free to submit.....


My youngest daughter suffers
From verbal type diarrhea
There never goes a minute past
When she won't bend my ear

This never ending babble
The questions and the"MUM"s
The more I try to block it out
The louder she becomes
 
"MUM, I'm really hungry"
"MUM, I've hurt my knee"
"MUMMY,I've just wet myself"
"MUMMY,what's for tea?"
"MUM,I don't like carrots"
"MUM, she's being mean"
"MUMMY,can I sleep with you,
I had a scary dream?"
"MUMMY, what's the F word?
"MUMMY, what's that string,
"MUMMY, what's this rubber tube
I found it in the bin?"
 
I wish I had a manual
For questions that I'm asked 
Nobody prepared me
How long does this phase last?

Reviews
Fantastic!
Written by Katanga (1163 comments posted) 11th July 2008
 
Fantastic, Paula! Love it! 
 
An idea for a final stanza? How about 
 
I'm afraid it lasts forever 
It'll last until I drop 
From sheer bloody exhaustion 
At life's last bus stop. 
 
 
If that's no good, I'll try another! 
 
Ha! Ha! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John

Written by Veronica_Milvus (595 comments posted) 11th July 2008
Does she do the WHY? thing as well. Always ends up at the uncaused cause, or otherwise "BECAUSE I SAY SO". 
 
I did like this, especially the "rubber tube"... 
 

Written by punchy (493 comments posted) 11th July 2008
Thanks John I like your verse but it is a little depressing, will it really go on forever? Oh God ,help me! 
 
Yes V M I get the why's as well but that's from my other daughter, Maybe I'll write a poem about that to x
bravo!
Written by fellpony (1580 comments posted) 12th July 2008
Unfortunately, Paula, we don't get warned about the exhausting nature of children until it's too late, when we get, "Yes, they all do that." 
 
My grand-daughter (just short of 3 yrs old) has recently discovered the power of WHY. It's fun, in small doses :) to see how long we can go on with the exchanges.
Wonderful, Paula!
Written by Brett (731 comments posted) 12th July 2008
I love that third stanza - the irritation of being bombarded with questions is heightened by the bouncy rhythm (reciting it fast gives it an almost scattergun effect.) 
 
Fortunately I don't have any children, but my cousin's two boys who visit regularly have never asked what the 'F' word is - they've never needed to after one of them poured Fairy Liquid into my pint! Not to be deterred I still drank it and convinced him that when I went to bed later that night I would snore bubbles. 
 
Enjoyed this, Paula. 
 
Cheers

Written by 1211kellie (158 comments posted) 12th July 2008
Oh yes, I know exactly how you feel. This is excellent. My daughter who is nearly 4 years old asks me 101 questions and it is really draining. The other day at the doctors surgery, she would not stop talking (loudly), it did make everyone smile though.  
 
Enjoyed 
 
Kellie ;)

Written by TwistedTales (544 comments posted) 12th July 2008
Lovely. Laughed out loud, throughout. Good one.  
 
Kellie - I think, it's only to a point that others smile :) 
 
Regards, 
TT
Ha! Ha! Ha!
Written by Katanga (1163 comments posted) 12th July 2008
Yes, my feeble effort was depressing - maudlinly so . . . 
 
I'm sure you've got that last stanza in you now that it's a new day, but no one else has had a bash, so here's another: 
 
It doesn't last forever 
One day she will stop - 
she'll run out of nagging problems 
And questions she can pop. 
 
Not a patch on your fine lines though! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

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