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Xmas 2005
By Rattle_Spear
27 December 2005
The fun is over..... The joy did not last..... Only the shopkeepers made the killing to last!

Xmas 2005 has come and went.

Leaving my bank balance with a dent.

Papers and receipts on the floor.

Presents and money out of the front door.

Now I know why Santa wears red and white.

To come and steal your assets through the chimney at night!

Xmas is very commercialised.

Why does it not leave any of us surprised?

27 Dec 2005 ;-(

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Rattle_Spear!
Written by twriter (117 comments posted) 29th December 2005
Rattle_Spear, oh Rattle_Spear 
 
just look what you have done 
 
You've written a great poem about Xmas 
 
But at the same time stolen all the fun 
 
The one that remains for me to say is 
 
jolly well done! 
Stolen Dreams
Written by Rattle_Spear (93 comments posted) 30th December 2005
twriter 
Thanks for the response. 
I may have stolen some joy, but, who has really stolen the profits? 
Who wants to do away with Christmas? 
Have a fab New Year & give us more of your writing in 2006. :grin

Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 3rd January 2006
Oh dear... sorry but there is simply no excuse for a grammatical howler like "has come and went" if it's used just to force words into a rhyme scheme.
A known fact
Written by Rattle_Spear (93 comments posted) 3rd January 2006
So true again. It reminds me of last years salary..... "It came and was spent!" 
I just hope that love can sustain us. 
 
:) o o o

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