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We Three - Act 1, scene 1 (corrected)
By jean.day
13 July 2008
This new project of mine is a sort of prequel and then sequel to another book I wrote, Consequences.  That was about Charles Walker's life in 1859. The main characters in this play (probably 15 parts in all) are Charles, and his two best friends, Lindsey Hall and Charley Cox. I wouldn't expect this to be put on as an actual play, but nowdays reading plays in groups is quite a common thing, and this might be suitable for that.

I was inspired by someone in Australia contacting me, as she is involved in researching the son of Lindsay Cox, who became a famous painter and was important in the art world of Melbourne in the early 20th century. 

My husband, Philip, thinks that a play format is all wrong for this material, but I thought I would try it out and see what you think.  

CHAPTER 1 - GOING AWAY PARTY FOR CHARLES

ACT I (1850-1860), scene 1

Scene 1. 1850

INVITATION:

We are having a farewell party for Charles Walker, who takes up his position as bookkeeper in Worcester next Monday. We would be pleased if you could join us.

Maria and Edward Cox, Mary, Caroline and Charley
9 Park Road, Toxteth Park, Liverpool
Date: August 31, 1851
Place: Cox house, 9 Park Lane, Toxteth
Time: 8 p.m.

Those invited:
Lindsay Hall, aged 20 (clerk to merchant)
Robert Hall, aged 25 (clerk to merchant)
Alison Hall, aged 30
Mr. William Hall, aged 60, (retired cotton broker)
from The Elms, 6 Princes Terrace, Toxteth

Harry Lomax, aged 15 ( apprentice to cotton broker)
Eliza Lomax, aged 18 (visitor)
currently staying at the Cox house
 
Mr. William Holt, aged 42 (attorney)
Mary Holt, 42
Mary Holt, aged 15
William Holt, aged 16, iron merchant apprentice
 
Everyone is sitting or standing around in the large drawing room, apparently having a great time. Charades is the game being played as the curtain rises, and Lindsay, Charles Walker and Charles Cox are miming, their actions being to walk around an imaginary pot in the middle of the floor, apparently stirring something. They stop and shake hands and look pensive, and then each goes in a different direction.
 
Alison: I know! You’re cooking something.

Charles: Perhaps you are close.

Mary Holt: Why are you all cooking together? Is it for a party?

Lindsay: No, afraid not.

Mr. Hall: I think you are indicating that each of you is going off on a journey in your own direction.

Charley: You nearly have it.

Eliza: Perhaps you are the witches in Macbeth, stirring your potion - and then saying, “When shall we three meet again?”

Lindsay: Well done Eliza. That’s the third one you’ve guessed. You’re really good at this game.

Mr. Cox: Well, I suggest that we older members of the group go off to the dining room and have some cards. Anyone fancy a game of whist?

Mrs. Cox: You four play and I will see how Jane is getting on with the refreshments.

The five adults go off stage, and the others, now that the regulated game is over, come closer together. All of the boys are eyeing Eliza, whose is by far the prettiest girl there. Alison, being somewhat older than the others, goes to the bookcase and seems to be separating herself from the younger ones.

Alison: It really was appropriate - that charade you did. You three have been as thick as thieves these last five years - growing up together, and now you will each have to take your place in the real world. Have you been to Worcester before, Charles?

Charles: Oh, yes. We have aunts and uncles on both sides there. It’s like a second home to me.

Eliza: Will you be living with your relatives?

Charles: No, I have two rooms in a boarding house - very close to the station, and only a short distance from our offices by the canal. But my Aunt Elizabeth will do my laundry - and no doubt she and my other uncle and aunt will provide me with meals on weekends, and a chance to get away from the howling brats that belong to my landlord.

Charley: I sort of wish that I was leaving home too - but father has set up this job for me - clerking in his cotton broker’s office. But hopefully it won’t be long before   I become a partner with him. He already has the sign - Edward Cox and Sons - so that means that have to be at least two of us working with him.

Alison: And what about your brother Edward marrying Eliza’s sister, Marianne. I expect they are still on their honeymoon.

Charley: Yes, they are. He’s just a year older than me, so I think it won’t be long before we all will be going down that route. Even though our mime was a bit of a joke - it made me think - when will we meet again? All of us, of course, from around here will see each other often enough - but I wonder when we will have our Gleesome Threesome again?

Lindsay: Maybe we can go to the Great Exhibition together next summer.

Charles: I certainly intend to go. I know several people who are doing exhibits for it. It really will be the experience of a lifetime.

Mary: Maybe it will be for a wedding. Which of us do you think will get married first?

(Lots of giggling and looking at one another.)

Caroline: You’re the oldest, Alison. It would only be fair for you to be first.

Alison: I have no intention of getting married. Taking care of the household and Father is my full time commitment.

Mary Cox: But don’t you long to get away and have a life of your own. I know I would. How unlucky for your mother to have died all those years ago, leaving you to cope with two brothers and a father who is a bit on the elderly side, not to put too fine a point on it.

Alison: Maybe one day, I will travel abroad again. I was born in the United States, you know, in Charleston, South Carolina.

William: I didn’t know that. Does that make you an American?

Alison: Well, yes, I suppose it does. And my mother was American born too. Her people were called the Jakes and they had a big cotton plantation. And my father, although he was born in Scotland, was making his fortune there in the cotton industry.

Charles: Through the slave trade, I expect.

Alison: No, of course not. We never had slaves.

Charles: But your grandparents, I expect they did. Who picked their cotton?

Alison (clearly upset now): I really don’t wish to discus the subject with you. You don’t understand how things are in the States.

Charley: It wasn’t only the States that had slaves you know, Alison. Liverpool people were in the thick of it. I could tell you the names of 20 famous Liverpudlians, with the mansions and streets named after them, who were involved in the slave trade.

William: You sound like you have looked into this. Give us some names. Are there any of our current politicians that were involved? It seems like a long time since the Emancipation Act - what was it 1811? Surely that should be more or less all over and done with by now.

Charles: Slavery played such a large part in Liverpool’s wealth, both before and after 1807, and how the leaders of the city were tied in to this should be brought out in full. The justification for slavery was a racism that went deep into British society and has lasted to the present day.

Charley: We have had endless discussion on this - as it is a bit of a hot topic for Charles, so I can add something to this conversation too. In 1814 a petition was sent to Parliament registering Liverpool’s opposition to slave trading. But Napoleon had just been defeated and France was being allowed to resume its own slave trade. Liverpool traders must have been outraged that French ships could carry slaves when theirs couldn’t.

Anyway, contrast this one petition with the 64 petitions Liverpool Council sent against the abolition of the slave trade during the Parliamentary debates of 1787-1807, and the fact that Liverpool Corporation paid for a delegation to remain in London to put their case to Parliament throughout this time!

Lindsay: A leading slave merchant, George Case, chaired the Council Finance Committee for thirty-eight years from 1775 and all the ‘grand old Liverpool families’ were ‘more or less steeped’ in slavery, either trading or owning or both.

Take the Gladstones for instance. John Gladstone was an MP from 1818 to 1827. He owned more than 1000 slaves in Demerara, now British Guyana which weren’t freed until 1834. In 1823 a revolt of slaves in the colony was put down by the governor, with 250 slaves slaughtered. Gladstone went on to help procure the West Indies planters a grant of £20 million in 1833 by way of compensation for the loss of their slaves but(the slaves got nothing!

His son, William Ewart Gladstone, who later became Prime Minister, devoted his first substantial speech in the Commons in 1832 to a defence of slavery.

Charles: And the Liverpool Corporation even commissioned a Reverend Raymond Harris to produce a pamphlet in which he stressed slavery’s “conformity with the principles of natural and revealed religion delineated in the sacred writings of the word of God.” Not surprising when the Church of England was the largest single owner of slaves in the West Indies!

Mary: I’m sure there were some people in Liverpool who were against it, weren’t there?

Lindsay: Cotton from America was first imported into Britain at Liverpool by William Rathbone  in 1784. Cotton was a product of slave labour so it is odd that an abolitionist like Rathbone should trade in it. Earlier in his life William Rathbone IV had persuaded his own father, William Rathbone III, not to take a share in a slave trading voyage to Africa.
 
Charles: I think it was Rev. James Martineau at Church who said something about how the cotton that we are still dealing and making fortunes out of still depends on the American slaves. If they weren’t there to pick the cotton for nothing, there would be nothing for us to buy and sell on. I think those of us here, who will be the dealers in cotton in the next two decades, should take a policy decision and not buy our cotton from the United States. There are sources in Egypt and India.

Caroline: Our father deals all sorts of products - tea is probably the biggest, and guano is starting to be really important.

Mary: How unpleasant, Guano. Where do they get that from then?

Robert: I know the answer to that one. Here, come over and I’ll show you on the map, where the guano comes from. (He has carefully engineered it so that he has separated one of the girls to a corner of the room, where they sit close together looking through a huge atlas, his arm surreptitiously going around her back, and almost but not quite touching her.)

Eliza: Why do they import guano anyway? Don’t our local birds produce enough or the right kind?
Charles: I think that places where certain birds roost on mountain sides, it can be shoveled off by the ton - places where hardly anyone lives, and it is a free resource. (He has an idea that he might like to get Eliza off in a corner too.) I expect my employer will be dealing with guano as well. We will be buying and selling all sorts of goods, but mainly coal, I think, coming along the canals from Yorkshire. Shall I show you on the map where I will be living?

Just then Mrs. Cox came in with the servants, Jane and Mary bringing trays with food on. A huge tea service was uncovered in the corner of the table, and as the adults came back into the room.

Maria: Help yourselves. There is Eel pie and Stuffed Mushrooms, especially for the vegetarians, amongst us, Charles, and Goofer Wafers, Macaroons and Queen Cakes.

Mr. Cox comes back into the room bringing with him a bottle of champagne, and Mr. Hall carries a tray with the appropriate number of glasses, already filled. They were passed around until everyone had one.

Mr. Cox: Let’s all raise our glasses to Charles - to wish him all the best in his new position, in his new city of Worcester - which he will never find as good as this one. To Charles.

Everyone: (laughing and raising their glasses: To Charles

Lindsay: And to when we three shall meet again, shall not be after too many months - and not involve all that much toil, trouble with lots of thunder lightening and rain. When the hurly burley’s done.

Charles: When the battle’s lost or won.

Charley: That will be ere set of sun.

Lindsay: Fair is foul and foul is fair, hover through the fog and filthy air.

Eliza: (laughing) Enough of that! Here is my toast. To Weddings, Christenings and Funerals.

Everyone: (again laughing): To Weddings, Christenings and Funerals.

Curtain down

Reviews
Hello Jean
Written by petmarj (107 comments posted) 16th July 2008
Must say I find reading a play script difficult to place. You handle the slave trade problem well, and allow the characters to put forward their points of view. 
You remind readers of the origins of slavery. In some ways they are similar to the present day. Your decision to put this work into Script instead of General may work. I'm sure most writers do wonder which section is best for them. 
You do appear to have a liking for Script work - it suits your style. 
I see that 'yaakovashoshana' is writing again. She is worth checking out. 
Look forward to seeing more of your play. 
Regards, 
Peter.
Thanks Peter
Written by jean.day (2361 comments posted) 16th July 2008
I do like script writing, and have only done one longish work before in script, so it makes a nice change for me.  
 
The three men I am mainly writing about, I hope I will be able to make quite different in character. Charles Walker, who I know best, was forever moralising in his diary - so he would be the one to bring up the subject of slavery and trying to influence his friends - who will be cotton brokers - to take a stand against continuing the trade with the US that feeds off slavery.  
 
Lindsay, the one who I am beginning to find out more about through my research, I think was a rather weak character - a follower rather than a leader.  
 
Charley Cox, I think was a joker and although very confident, he wouldn't take things as seriously as his cousin Charles.  
 

Written by Fledermaus (3477 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
Interesting, although I think you should watch out of becoming a history teacher rather than a historical writer. Although I do love to learn from the things you write, I'm not sure if your characters should necessarily be as informed as you are yourself. 
I'm curious if this slave issue is going to be an important part of this piece, for their history, especially that of the Maroons in the Caribbean and South America is incredibly fascinating.

Written by bluecity (432 comments posted) 13th August 2008
Hello Jean. What are you doing hiding out here? Peter gave you away, incidentally! 
 
Another very thoroughly researched piece. You are mixing history with "goings on" in the drawing room very effectively! I liked the way the 3 of them discussed politics, although I wonder if the boys would lecture the girls a bit and the girls would defer to them. Regarding Fledermaus's point, I think the characters could be very informed and quite adept at discussing the issue.  
 
Interesting insights into the times - that Charles thought it was quite acceptable to get someone to do his laundry, for instance. 
 
Rosemary
Thanks Rosemary
Written by jean.day (2361 comments posted) 14th August 2008
I quite like writing plays, although I haven't done many of them. You have the added problems of trying to visualise how it could really work - with staging and costuming and such. This piece of work has 14 parts, so not exactly the right length for a play, but I thought it was fun to try it out this way anyhow.

Written by coosh (922 comments posted) 4th September 2008
I do like the voices of the characters in this, and can easily visualise them all on stage. Once again, you pick an interesting historical subject which has clearly been thoroughly researched. This has probably already been commented on by someone but, at odd moments, I wondered about the characters' ease and familiarity with specific details - Charley is a mine of quite precise almost encyclopaedic information (notably figures, dates, the Gladstone section, etc.), but I suspect that was your intention. Thoroughly enjoyed - this looks as if it has been a fair project - do you have a rough idea of how long the overall play would take on stage?
Thanks David
Written by jean.day (2361 comments posted) 6th September 2008
I expect I put words into Charley's mouth that he never even thought about, much less spoke, but I was struggling to get some sort of theme to tie all these bits of play together - and decided on slavery in Liverpool. So I had to get somebody to put the facts across.  
 
Charles, however, I do feel I know personally - having written a couple of books about him - and read every single word of his 1851 diary about a million times. And he was very verbose and determined that he was right and it was up to him to inform the world of what it was doing wrong. 
 
As far as how long it would take to actually do the play, I would guess three hours, but I tried to make it so the props were simple and the makeup and costume changes could be done while others were on stage.  
Not that I seriously would ever expect that it would be staged.

Written by Lizzy (827 comments posted) 6th September 2008
Lots of scene setting here Jean. Looking forward to the development of characters. 
lizzy
Thanks Lizzy
Written by jean.day (2361 comments posted) 7th September 2008
There are a whole lot of characters in this first scene - and most of them either come again, although perhaps only in one or two scenes, and others are not seen again, but are mentioned.

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