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I liked this meeting with Colin. This particular meeting was well fun. We talked about my day and I told him all about what it’d been like at work and I said about going to Duncan’s dealer’s house (and Colin reckoned I’d been ripped off) and I even said about the fit girl at Price-Savers who’d told me about Duncan being outside and how I’d felt a connection with her.
We talked about Bradby as well and Colin told me not to worry about him too much and also to, “Give the guy a break,” which I thought was probably right, although there was no way for Colin to properly understand exactly what it felt like being ordered around by your mate and actually I then started thinking about how Bradby would’ve never talked to Colin like that but I didn’t say anything.
I also told Colin about Neale’s girlfriend and he said he wished he’d had the chance to see her and agreed with me about how Neale was a, “Lucky bastard.”
Yeah, originally it’d been a bit tense after Colin had asked me how I was doing and I’d thought that he was having a go. But he’d apologised and then said that he was sorry for being, “A bit of a shit,” the other day and said about how being dead was, “A bit of a drag.”
So yeah, this meeting was pretty nice. And it was like, exactly what I’d been wanting to do: get stoned with Colin. I missed that. He was obviously in a better mood and… he put me in a better mood too.
But even so, although it was good I felt like, yeah, it wasn’t real and I knew it wasn’t real this time, even though it felt real, and… well, I dunno. But anyway, I think Colin must’ve picked up on that too ‘cause at the end (like, just before he went) he said, “You know, I may not be around for a while after this,” and when I asked him, “Why?” he said, “I just don’t think it’s a good idea.”
At first I didn’t say much to this and just said something like, “Fair enough,” or, “A man’s gotta do what a man’s gotta do,” or some dumb joke but later when he got up to leave I asked him when the next time I’d see him would be and he said, “I don’t know,” and suddenly it hit me like how, I dunno, like how the happiest I’d been that day was at and around the moment Colin had appeared. But when I told him this he just said that it wasn’t true and that it was time that I started to realise that, or something.
I really wanted to stop him from going, to make him promise to come back soon, or even to grab his legs and say, “Come with me to the beach party at least,” but I didn’t. When he got up to leave I just said, “See you later,” and he said, “Yeah man,” and as he walked away back in the direction he’d come from I turned my head to once again look at the lights of Bracksea. |
AHA!
Written by fellpony (1752 comments posted) 16th July 2008 | Finally we get to a definition of Colin's link to Chambers. It feels as though it's been along time getting there, but this is perhaps because you post a lot of very short chapters rather than fewer, longer ones. I suspected Colin might be dead early on, then was thrown off the scent by his appearance in a subsequent scene. It works, mind you, it works, and now I see why you keep going on about Chambers and his drug habit - he mustn't know what is real and what is not.
I am curious as to how far through the whole story we have got. |
Written by chrismorton (65 comments posted) 16th July 2008 | Wow that's great! It's exactly the reaction I aimed for the reader to be having at this point. It's all there in the previous chapters but this is when i wanted the ball to drop so to speak.
In the current draft there are... well there are twelve sections (we are currently in section IV) and ninety-six chapters. So basically we are a third of the way through the book. |
Written by bluecity (432 comments posted) 17th July 2008 | 96 chapters! Wow! You write at a very unhurried pace.
I think Sue (Fellpony) has raised most of the points I would've raised. I had to read the word "dead" several times before I took it in.
Rosemary
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