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Demon Of My Past
By Adam_S
16 July 2008

Just a little poem about the past and love and all that jazz. all reviews and ratings welcome.

Sorry in advance for the word choice in the last line.




Welcome back demon of my past
Have you learned anything since last we passed?
If you kill me will you make it fast?
Or will you continue to haunt my past?

Am I able to see you at least once a month?
To hold you in my arms and feel your touch?
Or would the pleasure be too much?
If so can we talk it over lunch?
If not fuck off and leave me to lurch. 

Reviews

Written by Mr_E_Writer (225 comments posted) 16th July 2008
This made me laugh... for all the wrong reasons. 
Um, there's no line breaks. 
Rhyming past with past? 
Leave me to lurch? Is that leave me to stagger, or do you secretly fancy the bloke from the Addams Family? 
 
:? :eek :?

Written by Adam_S (11 comments posted) 16th July 2008
Thanks for bringing that to my attention I think I have fixed the line breaks now. 
 
And lurch as in leave me to continue you or stagger on as you pointed out. I think the line as more punch than just leave me be.

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