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By JourneyAtNight
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17 July 2008 |
Haven't been here in a long long time! Haven't written in quite a while either so any feedback and help with this one would be much appreciated.
This is an attempt at describing that heart-beating, adrenaline filled moment when you do something that you were too scared to do...
Reluctance tries to hush them
Muffle them out,
So you don’t have to hear them remind you,
Again and again, that
It’s time.
Thump, thump.
Go now.
Thump, thump.
But,
Warriors that they are,
Tearing through knots in your stomach
And trampling over words in your head,
They pulse through your veins towards quivering fingertips
And tearful eyes
Where their voices finally echo out in triumph.
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Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 18th July 2008 | | Haha, is it really that tragic!?? |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 18th July 2008 | Having watched dozens of children conquer fears a few weeks ago (adventure holiday - abseiling etc) I think this fits well with what I saw. Personally, I have an odd response to danger - it scares me, but I enjoy it. It's social situations when I sometimes feel the above.
Good to see you back.
Phil | Thanks Phil
Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 21st July 2008 | for your comment 
I'm exactly the same - it's meeting certain people in social situations. It can bring on the the dreaded wobbly-leg syndrome!
Thanks again, it's nice to be back.
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Written by Veronica_Milvus (626 comments posted) 23rd July 2008 | I liked this one although I was left wondering who the "they" are that aer warriors coursing through the veins - little adrenalin molecules perhaps?
V | Thanks V
Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 23rd July 2008 | ...and 'they' could very well be adrenaline molecules actually, however the whole piece is based mainly on the heart beating i.e. your heart beat seems to dominate during an adrenaline surge. I put it into the plural form (heartbeats) though because I thought it worked better hence the use of 'they'.
Thanks again, much appreciated!
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