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Poetry
Distances
By NathanRoberts
17 July 2008

The format and general style is borrowed from a poem by Deborah Harding, which in turn was influenced by a poem by Terence Winch.  Apparently, it's considered bad taste to write an autobiography before you reach 50.  So, this is bad taste, in easy to swallow sizes.




Around 1980, a woman falls from a stool,
           onto hard bakery tiles.
           I am not present, but can still recall
           the crack of skull on stone.

Around 1989, on the grounds of a pagan burial,
           I'm attempting drunken sex with a girl from Liverpool.
           The next day I ride
           three hundred miles on a borrowed bike.

Around 1968, a man wearing patent leather shoes
           and a herringbone jacket,
           slides on ice and cracks
           his collar bone.  I am not yet born.

Around 1976, in a Citroen, three miles from home, 
           the man driving looks in the mirror,
           asks me to recite my seven times table. 
           I am a generation away,
           on the back seat.

Around 1978, a boy slides ten feet
           down a sheer cliff face,
           then rolls a further twenty on grass. 
           He returns home - cut, bruised and shaken. 
           I am just shaken.

Around 1982, standing at the entrance to a class,
           a bigger girl with glasses, brushes by. 
           Her perfume makes me want to dive
           into her pool, curl at the bottom like a water snail.
           I don't know her name and
           never smell her again.

Around 1975, a neighbour's cross terrier
           enters our front room
           - craps on the carpet.
           I am the first to notice, but pretend I'm not.

Reviews

Written by Veronica_Milvus (591 comments posted) 17th July 2008
Nicely done. Perhaps a few of us should try the same format and distil our own memories in this way. 
 
I liked:  
 
I am a generation away,  
on the back seat.  

Written by Phil (6628 comments posted) 18th July 2008
Veronica has picked out my stand out line too. 
 
Also liked 1982. 
 
Phil

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 19th July 2008
Thanks guys! I guess my favourite was 1989, it's as close to fun as it gets here! 
 
It's quite an addictive format, once you get going. Harding's poem is a bit more subtle than mine, with a more random selection, and a more subtle connection (it's called 'How I Knew Harold' if you want to try and find it on the web). Haven't read the Winch original.

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