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Where's my Bone?
By PuppyWuppy
18 July 2008
I do feel rather strange doing a story in children's when most of the stuff here is poems, bnut I shall do it anyway!

I sent this story to Josie a while back, and since then it has been on my computer, feeling bored and taken advantage of.

I was going to do something with story, but there have been certain developements in my life that haven't allowed that to happen.

I hope you LOVE it as much as I enjoyed writing it.

I'm still improving it, now things are sorted and I am able to do so!

Love you all(yes including you-know-who!)

One day, little Tommy the terrier ran to the park to dig up his bone.

“I want my bone!” he said as he ran.

But when he got there, he found it had disappeared!

“Where’s my bone?” said Tommy.

Tommy ran off to the bushes to get his bone.


When he got there, he saw Loud Larry the Labrador sniffing at the ground!

“WHERE’S MY BONE!” barked Tommy.

“I haven’t got it!” Larry boomed, “I bet that Roy the rover has! I saw him by the park

bench looking suspicious!”

So Tommy and Roy set off to the park bench.


They jumped over feet, zoomed through legs, ran into a picnic, chased after ducks,

and dodged an ice cream van before they finally reached the park bench.


They heard a CHOMP CHOMP CHOMP underneath the bench. There was Roy the Rover!

“WHERE’S MY BONE!” barked Tommy.

“I haven’t got it!” chomped Roy, “This is my toy!”

Poor old Tommy sighed. Where on earth was his bone?


Roy, Larry, and Tommy all made there way up Dappler’s Hill to look for Tommy’s

bone in the trees, when they heard a CHOMP CHOMP CHOMP coming from a bush

“What’s that?” Tommy said.

They went to the tree to find out where the noise was coming from.


The sound became louder and louder and louder till Tommy pushed a bush away and saw….

OLLIE THE COLLIE WITH HIS BONE!!!!!!!!!!!


Ollie the collie gasped and got up to run.

“GIVE ME MY BONE!” yelled Tommy.

“NEVER!” Ollie yelled back, speeding down the hill with a great big bone in his

mouth.


Roy, Larry and Tommy all began to chase Ollie the collie all the way down the steep

steep hill. He was going to the pond!

“Stop running and give me my bone!” Tommy shouted.

“NO!” Ollie shouted back.


The pond had got closer and closer and closer then suddenly…

SPLASH!!!!! All four of dogs fell into the muddy old pond.

“Where’s Ollie?” Tommy spluttered as horrible green slime hung on his lip.

The three dogs looked all around them, but Ollie had disappeared into the park.


With no idea where his juicy big bone had gone, a very sad Tommy returned home.

As he sat on his dog bed, he felt a lump underneath him.

“What’s this?” Tommy asked.

He pushed his bed over and looked underneath….


There, in all its glory, was big brand new bone!

Tommy had hidden more than one!

Reviews

Written by 1211kellie (148 comments posted) 18th July 2008
Hi PW, I thought this was really good, it flowed well and I liked the interaction between all the dogs. A funny and lively story. 
 
Well done. 
 
Kellie 8)

Written by mia_ms_kim (950 comments posted) 18th July 2008
With Kellie above. Very enjoyable. The animals sound so very cute. 
 
Mia :grin

Written by Josie (2718 comments posted) 19th July 2008
Nice story for younger children, but it would be better displayed in single spacing with double between paragraphs. Better on the eye. Well done.

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