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Your little girl
By rachelmay40
20 July 2008

She won’t be late.

She won’t forget.

She’s really sorry.

She’s honestly upset.

She doesn’t do that.

She knows not to.

She wouldn’t lie

She told me its true.

She’s not the type.

She’s not like that.

She doesn’t deceive people.

She doesn’t back chat.

She’s a good student.

She’s always at school.

She knows what is right.

She knows the rule.

She wouldn’t do it.

She wouldn’t know how.

She’s my little girl.

She promised me now.

She’s not popping pills. She wouldn’t O.D.

You thought you knew her, just like you thought you knew me.

Reviews

Written by mc (1 comments posted) 20th July 2008
This has a really good flow. The rythmn pulls you through the poem as it builds. Also like the shape.  
 
mc
Unimpressive
Written by brickle (11 comments posted) 21st July 2008
Just like the next sixteen from the same source that are selfishly cluttering the poetry section.

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