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Frog
By Jkaye
20 July 2008
This was something I came up with in a creative writing class. The idea was to take inspiration from a sentence in a book and create a poem from that. The sentence I chose was from The Bromeliad by Terry Pratchett.

This was my first poem that could be described as 'good' in any sense.

Frog

This tadpole lives,
On a jungle plant.
His horizons stretch,
From leaf to leaf.

    His plant is his world,
    This small green Tad.
    He knows only of,
    His Bromeliad.

        Then change occurs,
        As expectation.
        As he grows, he learns,
        By exploration.

            At the edge of his plant,
            He stands surprised.
            There are hundreds of worlds,
            Before his eyes.

                Horizons grow,
                Amongst the strands,
                Within the world tree,
                His world expands.

                    His world now branches,
                    By leaving his plant.
                    He’ll explore every world,
                    You see if he can’t.
                
                Soon he is joined,
                By the other sprogs.
                As their world expands,
                They stand agog.

            Suspended in space,
            Over nepenthes,
            They explore worlds,
            In the canopies.

        With one small hop,
        And a giant leap,
        He traverses space,
        To another world tree.

    From this point he can see,
    Many mountains of trees.
    All of them peaking,
    His curiosity.

As the sun sets,
Still his world grows.
He sees distant hills,
The horizon explodes.


Reviews
Wow.
Written by KaydieKate (75 comments posted) 4th August 2008
Can I say it again? Wow. 
This is very good. Everything about this I liked. Even the zig-zaggy patter. Excellent!
Self-critique ...?
Written by Jkaye (1 comments posted) 4th August 2008
Thanks. As you can see, the first stanza doesn't rhyme and stands out. NEPENTHES (Nep-Enth-EES) was a blessing and a curse to find because the plant comes from South America, from the same place as the Bromeliads and so fits in perfectly and it rhymes with 'canopies'. The trouble is that everyone reading it for the first time reads it as 'Nep-Enths' which is confusing and they have to read that stanza twice which interrupts the flow of the poem.

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