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Dream Poem
By Katanga
21 July 2008


A real fragment from a dream I had last night. Most of it simply flew away . . .


I woke up, quite intrigued with a poem I dreamed I’d saved safely on GW  ‘For Me’, thinking “I must edit that!”

 

Then I realised, as wakefulness intruded, that I hadn’t saved it – it was all in my dream.

 

Words and lines flew away – I pushed myself back into a sleepy state and sleep-walked downstairs, found a pen and wrote this down – a fragment of what I’d had . . .

 

Not the Kubla Khan, I know! But weirdness has no bettering! (for those who know me, 'Beardless has no lettering!) 

 

I think it’s about a dead soldier, but in my dream I was simply obsessed by ‘homonyms’, and ‘lies’ meaning ‘reclines horizontally’ or ‘untruths’ were swirling in my head.

 

I promise no opium or skillets of boiling milk were involved!

 

I didn’t even have Mr Porlock’s unwelcome knock on the door as an excuse for brevity!

 

Anyone else had this strange experience?

 

Cheers!

 

John X




Dream

 

Death is in him spoken

Death within him lies

He fell under a sinking sun

That pales, falls and dies

 

Death lies under his eyelids

Truth lies underground

His prayer has gone before him

He never made a sound.

Reviews
Brett, old boy!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 20th July 2008
Just wanted to say that in my sleep, there's an echo of your good self here: 
 
'Dear soldier boy, who never knew he bled' 
 
That got into my my dream and conjured up my last two lines: 
 
'His prayer has gone before him 
He never made a sound.' 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 21st July 2008
Hi John, 
 
Quite like this one, though I'm not sure about 'Truth lies underground'. If you wanted to play on the homonym thing I suppose you could risk something like: 'The son lies underground'. 
 
I once dreamt a song, but it wasn't up to 'Yesterday' standards. I was reading something about 'Kubla Kahn' the other day, saying it was a bit of a myth that he dreamt it from scratch. Most of the opening few lines are already written somewhere else, I think. 
 
Also, bit cheeky, but there's a nice little bit of free verse floating in your intro: 
 
I think it’s about a dead soldier,  
but in my dream  
all I saw were ‘homonyms’,  
‘lies’ meaning ‘untruths’ 
or, ‘horizontally reclines ’.  
Both were swirling in my head. 
 

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 21st July 2008
Speaking of Brett. Where is he? Anyone know?
Brett back Tomorrow!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 21st July 2008
Yes Rob, he said was off somewhere for a long weekend. No worries! I'm sure he'll be chuffed at your concern!
Dreams
Written by Adam_S (11 comments posted) 22nd July 2008
No I'm not going to start talking about the classic song by Fleetwood Mac, but dreams I feel are very important in a writers life. Many of my dreams that I have had I've turned into poems, I have however never written them so raw as John has here.  
 
The last two lines of the first stanza are fantastic. Try written half a poem or so then going to bed, I guarantee you'll wake up in the middle of the night with all sorts of words that go with the last word you wrote. The challenge is getting out of bed to write them. 
 
Great job John keep it up. 
 
Adam 
 

Written by Josie (2849 comments posted) 24th July 2008
Excellent John, but may I ask what you meant by "Truth lies underground?"Isn't it strange how our minds work and where do the words come from? Perhaps you had a spirit working on your brain John - - - ah! not a spirit but a muse, of course. The brotherr of Alice, no doubt - Dennis.

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