Originally posted in poetry, yet it would appear that they did not like it;
at least, they sought neither to pass comment nor judgement upon it.
Ah! Space up for grabs? I'll have some of that.
Deep in the heart of the harvest lands, through whose yellow fields a river’s placid water flows, he stands and waits, this silent man, the hodmedod. Dressed to the nines in cast-off clothes, untiringly he waits to bear witness to a murder.
Then comes the proud Jaguar, prowling the lanes, resounding from within its emerald skin a joyous refrain that, by the talons of an ill wind, is torn asunder. Stripped of violin, harp and cello, that which remains then falls upon the deaf ears of the silent man, this hodmedod, who, dressed to the nines in cast-off clothes, can do nought but stand in a field of crows and slowly, ever so slowly, decompose.
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3291 comments posted) 23rd July 2008 | I put hodmedod into google and was taken to the World of Warcraft so I'm not any wiser. The repetition would seem to indicate a poetic turn of phrase, if not poetry. Certainly intriguing but I must admit I'm out of my depth here.
I thought dressed to the nines meant to be beautifully dressed and I'm not sure you can be in cast offs. As I say, out of my depth.
cheers
jane
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Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 23rd July 2008 | "I thought dressed to the nines meant to be beautifully dressed and I'm not sure you can be in cast offs."
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder?
Perhaps a lowly vagrant who sees a fellow down-and-out parading around in a cast off dinner jacket might consider his peer to be dressed to the nines, at least by his own standards.
However, we are not talking tramps, but….
Your Google must Google differently to my Google.
Cheers,
Steve.
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Written by Phil (6632 comments posted) 24th July 2008 | I've known for a while hat my Google has a mind of its own.
Honesty being at a premium on GW - I'll dive in.
Didn't see this in poetry - but to be honest, would probably have passed it by if I had. Were it not for your intro, I'd have passed this by too.
It's probably one of those pieces that stir references and meaning for you, but like Jane, I'm out of my depth here. Possibly a reflection on the writing, possibly me.
It does strike me (and I'm one to talk) that you go through periods of scatter gun creativity and may miss some of the gems you produce. The previous piece that I've just reviewed has enormous promise. Perhaps a more focused creative process might reap better dividends. Perhaps I should mind my own business.
Perhaps negative about the piece - but far from negative about hte writer and the potential some pieces show.
Phil |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 24th July 2008 | This was a personal one (akin to Mike’s brain farts) where I wanted to do something about a field of crows and scarecrow.
I used to say about myself, that I threw a lot of mud at the wall to see what would stick, but I’ll settle for ‘scatter gun creativity’. Between my scatter gun and Mike’s brain farts, we could probably make one scatter brain. Or perhaps not.
All the best,
Steve |
Written by punchy (487 comments posted) 28th July 2008 | Just read this, dunno what it's about really but it was kind of dark and unkempt so i liked it anyway.
To be honest I don't really understand half the stuff I read on GW but if I read it twice it's worthy of a comment.
P x |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 28th July 2008 | Hello Punchy. It sounds like it’s time I put this one to bed.
Firstly, allegedly, in Berkshire, a scarecrow is called a hodmedod.
So, to me, the story is of a scarecrow, standing in a field, silently watching a murder of crows, when a Jaguar (car) comes driving down the lane playing loud classical music. By the time the music has reached the deaf ears of the scarecrow, much of the sound has been lost to the elements, hence the closing pun of decompose (de-compose).
It worked for me but, clearly, nobody else.
Such is life!
All the best,
Steve.
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Written by Katanga (1145 comments posted) 28th July 2008 | Hey - I don't care how this is 'classifiied' - it doesn't mattert really, it's brilliant!
I am now happy to go to bed, which I wasn't before . . .
John
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Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 28th July 2008 | Thanks John, I'm now off to the land of nod as well.
Pleasent and productive dreams.
All the best,
Steve. |
Written by 1211kellie (155 comments posted) 4th August 2008 | If I had not read your explanation of this story I certainly would have not got the full picture. But I really loved this piece, especially the lonely scarecrow left to slowly decompose.
Kellie x |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 7th August 2008 | I'm pleased that you really loved it even though you hadn't got the full picture, it proves that there's some merit in ambiguity.
All the best,
Steve. | I guessed
Written by fellpony (1571 comments posted) 21st August 2008 | | that the hodmedod might be a scarecrow, but it took me to the final paragraph before i did so. Smashing word! Thank you for introducing me to it! But shame on you Steve for that awful pun. | Pun?
Written by Katanga (1145 comments posted) 21st August 2008 | As per my previous review, I think this is realy striking. But now I think I see your metaphorical point about writing, but I may be completely wrong?
'decompose'? is this the pun that fellpony above refers to?
Still bemused, but impressed by this piece.
Cheers!
John |
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