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| By rachelmay40 | ||||||
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This is the first chapter of something I want one day to turn into a novel but I've yet to accumulate my research, in the mean time. Let me know what you think. The year was… I don’t think anyone could say when this thing started indefinitely. Some say it was when he first laid eyes on her, some say it was the day he committed what is said to be the worst crime known to man. Others, admittedly the more passionate of us would say it started the day a war involving the deaths of hundreds of innocents started, but that’s not for me to say. I am here to enlighten you with the events that sparked the passion between two young people and nearly sparked a fire that could have destroyed them.
20th of October
He could feel the flames at his back as he ran away from the
now burning settlement. He could hear the shouting voices of his regiment
calling after him “Murray!”, “Soldier you get back here!”.
They’d arrived at the settlement only half an hour ago,
though it seemed like years now. The officer’s, who’d been riding in front
slowed to a stop, he didn’t need to ask what they were there for. He knew well
enough that they were going to search for enemies, if only he’d known then how
far it would go. The leading officer, Sergeant Grant dismounted and walked over
to the nearest house. The other officers quickly followed. He’d watched and
tried to listened but could make out nothing. After a few minuets of muffled
conversation the other officers turned from the rest of the troupes. Then five
of the group of eight officers walked over towards the regiment, each towards
an individual man. He’d seen the officer who’d approached him, Sergeant Riley, a
smug son-of- a-bitch if ever he’d seen one. Riley and he had joined the
regiment at about the same time and over the months had bought himself a
promotion, something about his father owning an oil company. Riley wouldn’t
know a hard day’s work if he’d walked in on it. Riley stopped and took a lit
torch from another soldier and a plank of wood from supplies.
Steven watched as
Riley approached him, there was a sign of anger and madness he’d never seen
before as Riley handed him the torch. “Barricade them in” he said firmly “then
burn it”. Steven just stood there, completely taken aback, not able to move or
say anything, he must have misheard him, he must have. He’d never questioned
the raids before but this, this must surely be murder. They weren’t even sure
if enemies were here, they’d not even searched the place. He opened his mouth
to say something, but Riley cut him off. “Now soldier” he said. There was coldness
in his voice that made Steven sick to the stomach, surely he must understand
that these were innocent people. Of course he understood that it was an order.
Violence was understandable in a war like this but he would not, no, could not
murder innocent people. “I’m waiting soldier” said Riley still holding the
torch in his hand. He reached out slowly taking the torch from Riley, then
after Riley had moved away he turned and without a word threw the torch into
the long wet grass that lay not far away. The torch landed in the grass and
went out. He turned back to face Riley whose face was frozen in shock. “I
believe I gave you an order!” he said firmly.
“I’m well aware of that sir” said
Steven looking Riley dead in the eye, he wasn’t going to back down, he wasn’t
going to be walked over. “I’m sorry sir” he continued “but I will not agree to
slaughter innocent people”.
Riley’s mouth went firm “you are a soldier” he said
indignantly “you have been given an order and you will follow it through”.
Steven was silent for a moment before saying firmly “no sir, I can’t”. Riley
looked him up and down before that smug smile Steven knew so well filled his
face. “So be it” he said, and he nodded at the soldiers on either side. Steven
felt his arms being gripped painfully. These men, these friends he’d once held
so dear to him, were they now going to be part of his execution? As Riley
turned to fetch another torch for the next soldier Steven saw the other men as
they began to light the back houses on fire. Not five seconds went by before
the screaming started, it was harsh and high pitched, unbearable almost. As the
screaming continued Steven looked at the faces of the other men. They were agitated,
nervous almost. He saw the looks of worry and concern in their faces. Suddenly
the realisation caught them, they were murdering people they didn’t even know.
Suppose that was what they had been doing all along, but now they were
beginning to question. As the man on his right listened to the screams of the
victims as they echoed through the night air he felt him loosen his grip Steven
saw his chance. With one vicious swing he’d pulled his arm away from the man on
the right and punched the soldier on the left so he fell straight to the floor
and without stopping for consideration he turned and ran. He heard Riley calling after him and yelling at the other men to go after him. He’d cleared the field the settlement was in within minuets but still they were after him. All that had seemed like hours ago now, yet it could only have been a few minuetes. Suddenly he saw the tree stump and his legs gave way as he slumped down behind it. He leant back against the tree stump, his heart burning in his chest and breathing heavily. He felt like he couldn’t move but he knew he couldn’t stay here. He wouldn’t let his life end like this. He would not be shot as a mutineer, he would not die a traitor. He tried to gather his thoughts together but every time he closed his eyes all he could see was the flames of the burning settlement and all he could hear in his head was the ringing screams of the victims who’d perished. He knew he’d have to move on soon, his assailants weren’t that far behind him.
Suddenly the sound of footsteps reached
his ears and he lifted his head. Any other man would be gripped by fear at the
thought of being captured but not him. In his time out here, god knows he’d
been here long enough his senses had adapted to his surroundings, he began to
listen more, see more, think more. As he heard the footsteps approaching he
could tell that they were not firm, authority like footsteps, not a man in
charge. Nor were they silent and skilled footsteps, like those of a military
man. The sort who could sneak up and kill you in an instant, no these steps
were cautious, shuffled, almost clumsy. These were the steps of new blood,
possibly a young boy no older than he’d been when he first joined. The stranger
was no more than 10 yards from him now, he knew he’d have to face him if he had
a chance of getting away. With no second thought or fear for his own personal
safety he rose from behind the tree trunk turning to face the stranger. He
recognised the stranger almost at once, it was young Frederick Thomson, a
recent recruit. The military were having to recruit more and more men to
replace the dead. Thomson was an innocent boy, baby face, blonde hair, blue
eyes and he wrote home to his mother once a week. In a way Steven admired him,
the fact that he still harboured innocence within him, not the brutishness you
got with some soldiers. An eternity seemed to go by, neither man spoke or
moved. Steven didn’t even pay attention to the lights of the torches belonging
to his assailants that were coming closer. He didn’t care if it meant his
death, this boy was the only good thing about this damn war, and if it took him
forever he was going to convince him he was on his side. Then slowly out of the
corner of his eye he saw the boys hand lift. Steven felt a twitch of fear, was
the boy going for his gun? Was he going to shoot him or maybe signal for help?
For the first time since he’d turned and run from his regiment Steven was
actually worried. Looking up into the boys steady eyes Steven waited. Then
slowly, almost reverently Frederick
extended his hand for Steven to shake. Steven stared down at Frederick’s hand as though it was a new
custom he’d not been used to. His pause was only momentary though, Steven didn’t
wait long before lifting his hand to connect with Frederick’s. As their two hands connected
Steven felt something, something bigger than a static shock and yet smaller
than a religious epiphany. Frederick
looked up into Steven’s eyes and, in a gentle voice, as though he were passing
his eternal judgement he said “go”. Steven felt a great weight lift from his
shoulders as Frederick
spoke. He clinged to the boys hand that bit more firmly and with a voice filled
with gratitude and relief he said “thank you”. Suddenly just after he’d spoken there was a loud bang. Steven glanced over Frederick’s shoulder. About twenty yards from where they were standing was a soldier standing, his gun pointing up into the air. Frederick pushed Steven back towards the other side of the field and said in a rushed and panicky voice “go…now”. Without a word Steven turned and ran, he flew across the field like a bullet, not pausing even to look back. After what seemed an age he reached the fence on the other side. He could hear the shouting voices of the party of men the shot fired must have attracted. Steven placed his hands on the fence and quickly climbed over. However, as his feet touched the floor on the other side he looked up. As he did he heard a single shot and saw out of the shadows in the distance one of them fall to the floor. Steven could feel anger boiling through him. They’d killed him, they’d killed Frederick. Steven turned and carried on, he couldn’t afford to be caught, not now. However, as he trudged onwards across the fields towards the horizon he made a solemn vow that one day, maybe not soon but one day he would take revenge on those animals. Frederick was an innocent boy who’d been murdered because he knew what was right and, so help him god he would make sure that Frederick’s death had not been in vain.
End of chapter one
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