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Poetry
Reciting in Unison
By amsford
24 July 2008
The section in italics may be a little too US-centric... if so, my apologies!

“All together now”
Irritates me to no end.
Droning declarations are
Denuded of meaning.
Individual reflection is lost
To the snore-worthy whole.
Each syllable is loud and proud.
Look—some need swallowing,
Others masticating.
Some few are popped like gum.
The words walk with stately steps
Down the aisles of the classroom
Or church
Amelodically progressing
To a flat end.

I pledge allegiance,
full of grace
with socks of lace
and beaded ceintures,
to the republic for which it
suffered and died and was buried.
On my honor, I will try
to sin no more
with Liberty and Justice—

None of them are strange.


Same pace every place
Except in Texas where church-speak’s stultifying drawl
Paradoxically speeds my bloodbeat until my soul screams “Deliver us from evil!” as
They intone that they “Will be done.”
In room 204
Eighteen students
Speaking in unison
Strip-mine meaning—

So the muse, horrified
Sticks her fingers in her ears and shuts her eyes so tight
Her crows’ feet tap on her temples.
After the muddy mutter ends
She breathes,
Dwelling on the
Near-silence,
And hears the hush of
Re-recitation.
Meredith McMahon was
Unwilling to allow
The fly-buzz
To be treated
That way.

Reviews
Ah !
Written by patterjack (1158 comments posted) 24th July 2008
I agree-- but there is a place for choral speaking done well 
 
A friend of mine trained the chorus for my production of the The Choephori and the ladies were magnificent . 
 
I think you have captured the more awful efforts so well-- and the italicised section has a nice bite ! 
 
patterjack

Written by Phil (6628 comments posted) 24th July 2008
Enjoyed this too. No worries over the italicised part either - worked very well. 
 
Phil
interesting
Written by fellpony (1569 comments posted) 25th July 2008
I take your point, and my reaction was similar to that of patterjack - choral speaking of verse can be very dramatic. However, I accept that your first target is the unrehearsed repetition of formulas, which isn't the same thing. I too enjoyed the italic section - you could go wild and add well known quotations from other countries and religions...

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3288 comments posted) 25th July 2008
I had not trouble understanding it. I'm not qualified to comment on it as poetry, but always think of it as compression of expression so,for me, this worked well. 
jane

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