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The Mysterious Moonlight Beauties Darktale Con't Revised (copyrighted 2005)
By lilaliadanpoet
31 December 2005

Good evening ,

 

Happy New year to you all .

 I've been writing since I was 5 years old and I've always loved to create stories and read about stories with unsual twist . I've been dancing as well and my creative ideas seem to come togeather . I've recently been accepted to Middlesex University in London for the new year starting in januay and I'm very excited to have the oppurtunity to be studying the Creative Writing and Media programme . 

 I hope to gain much more  expereince in the  great profession in the writing world . At the moment I write freelance and I also have a xanga page which featrues some of my writing .


What tales of love do I have to tell ?

Tales of loveliness , and loving well ?,

I have no tales of love to tell ,

Only memories of you're  captivated bliss ,

And the sense of you're ,

 Warm passionate kiss .

Filled with nothing more than ,

A hapless hour of happiness ,

And faded bliss .

Should I be recalling this ?

As  I sensed you're kiss on my brow,

Realizing that you were parting ,

 From me now ?

How could our love vanish away ?

In a night ; or in a day ?

 A love which we both  shared,

Between our hearts .

Was it a dream ? ; a dream within ,

A dream ,

About the one whom I loved ,

The one whom I loved with a ,

Presence so serene as a dove ,

For you're  love fell upon me like banners ,

Of moonlight ,

While vales of light draped upon,

Us ,

As we both slumbered ,

Into the dawning light .

Yet on this dreary night,

My emotions scream ,

  They creep through my thoughts ,

So deep ; but  I will not weep ,

For the words which you speak ,

I shall keep them forever with me .

I cannot bare to lose you're love from ,

My sight ,

Were we suppose to part this ,

Very night ?

For When I looked into you're eyes ,

I realized that it was better ,

For me to say goodbye ,

And yet you still ask why .

Copyrighted©2005 Ant.Best

(Do not copy or duplicate all work

copyrighted by the owner )

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Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 3rd January 2006
Your, is the word you need honey. You're You are.  
 
 
Only memories of you are captivated bliss , 
 
And the sense of you are , 
 
Warm passionate kiss . 
 
It does not make sense. 
 
I think you might need to take a look at your punctuation too. 
 
Lot's of : and ; not really needed. 
 
I know it's a bit difficult to get the hang of formatting here. If the poem was a little more tight in it's formatting it might not seem so long and drawn out. I got a bit lost half way through. 
 
I have sent you a private message. 
 
spidey 
 
 
 
 

Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 4th June 2006
Good luck! I got a bit lost and confused aswell. But as I say on these things often enough - I'm no poet.  
 
Hope the course is going well. Wish it was me! 
 
IPF

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