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I love the smell of Nuclear Armageddon i Written by Nick (163 comments posted) 28th July 2008 |
Nice little piece - I wasn't expecting the world to end - but hell it's got to some time!! I heard an angel scream once - well when you try to pull their wings off that tends to happen! Sorry this wasn't much of a review but I couldn't really think of anything to add. It's a good little story. Keep up the good work. Nick |
Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 28th July 2008 |
That's a speedy apocalypse. Where are the plagues, the wars, the famine? Or maybe this is a more local... incident? With many works of yours it's not exactly clear whether there is some hidden meaning and it is one big metaphor or maybe if it's just all surrealism. I guess that's probably what surrealism intends to bring about.
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Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 28th July 2008 |
Hello again, Nick, thanks for being there. ‘Sorry this wasn't much of a review…’ It’s a far better review than most readers offer, so thanks. All the best, Steve.
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Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 28th July 2008 |
Hello Maus. Surreal? Mmm! ‘That's a speedy apocalypse.’ This is apocalypse by man rather than some god. There’s a vicious rumour in GB that you get a three minute warning, so no plagues, wars, or famine. Just another big bang. Who knows, you might be sitting in a lay-by yourself one day and....
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Written by Emmuttmax (203 comments posted) 28th July 2008 |
| Once again, in a few words, you capture the essence of a much larger picture. The juxtaposition of Wither's "Lovely Day" and the specter of the world being snuffed is brilliant. |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 29th July 2008 |
Once again, thank you for your valued critique, Mike. All the best, Steve. |
Very Strong! Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 29th July 2008 |
This really took me by surprise, and by the balls, and shook me. Excellent! And what a last line! Cheers! John |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 29th July 2008 |
John, hello again. Are you thinking of joining the short story fraternity? Fancy something a little longer? Waaaaaaah! Bwa-ha-ha, guffaw. Whatever the reason, you’re welcome, just please don’t start writing dedication prose, I don’t think us simple souls in shorts could stand it! “Ah yes! Johnny, dear, dear Johnny, darling, I recall him fondly. A dashing blighter and a better writer of prose you could never hope to meet. Alas! Johnny, dear Johnny has departed; the blighter got too horny. A heart attack, you see, whilst endeavouring to write PC while swooping down upon one knee to caress a maidens silk-white feet. ’Twas the stench wot dun fer ’im guv’nor.” All the best, Steve.
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Written by Asferthecat (859 comments posted) 30th July 2008 |
Wow, this was good. I spotted a SPAG: dogfitting should be dogfighting. Or perhaps it shouldn't? sometimes I feel I barely scratch the surface of your writing. |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 30th July 2008 |
My dear Puss, you most certainly scratched something. It’s nice to know that someone is paying attention. A dog-fit was never on the cards; it’s not even on my PC dictionary, so god knows where it came from! Thanks, and all the best, Steve. |
hey Written by TurboWolffe (98 comments posted) 4th August 2008 |
yay for steve! Wow, that ending kinda caught me there. I was actually expecting the thing to go on, cuz, i wanted to read more. I don't know why, that's just how it felt. Reminded me of a book i recently read: Lucifer's Flood. couldn't stop reading it, and it's a nice little bit if you want to read. 'Twas Awesomness -TW |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 4th August 2008 |
Thanks, shewolf, it's nice to get a 'yay' now and again. If you want to 'go long' you could try Greasepaint Smiles -longer; it's in crime and thriller, or, go all out with Shadow Puppets. Hey, yay, I'm blowing my own trumpet! All the best, Steve. |
hi Written by Scrawl (80 comments posted) 7th August 2008 |
| I rather like the way the apocalypse arrives unheralded, rather like we are led to believe a nuclear event would - as you say perhaps three minutes warning then its all over. Nice one. |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 7th August 2008 |
Thanks Scrawl, nice on. All the best, Steve. |
Written by origami.tree (21 comments posted) 27th August 2008 |
I'm a bit late to the party, but i thought this was great! Very descriptive. I was starting to wonder what was going on, it was just too...nice. And then BANG - Apocalypse! Good work |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
Dear paperboy, I'm pleased that you enjoyed this. As they say: "Better late than never". I wonder who THEY are? All the best, Steve. |
Written by cheryl1984 (13 comments posted) 9th September 2008 |
Hi Steve, I thought this was great! I'm a sucker for a shock ending! Cheryl |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 10th September 2008 |
Cheryl, thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. I'm pleased that you liked it. All the best, Steve. |
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