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Poetry
Past
By meadowcroft1964
28 July 2008


Past effects the future
Over that there's no suture
 The cuts are so deep 
There's no way I sleep 
All the abuse all the pain 
It comes again and again 
Never will it be the same  
Never again thats plain 
Memories flood my head 
Do I deserve this pain 
Again and again 


 

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Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 28th July 2008
This has a real desperate feel to it, which makes it more powerful but also difficult to read, which is possibly the intention.Even the type face makes it chaotic. 
I can't say I enjoyed it but poems about pain and abuse cannot obviously be enjoyable. 
As far as the subject goes, memories can certainly haunt and effect your future unless you choose to face them ,deal with them ,and then let them go(not something which can be persued alone, but with help), anything is possible with determination. 
Oh and the last line would work well with a question mark, and the answer is NO! :)

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