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Suicidal
By ParadiseLost
28 July 2008
I read meadowcroft1964 poem suicide and I just come up with this. It's rough though...

I look into the mirror
With hate looming over.
The reflection is stranger.
Whose lives’ in danger. 

I don’t want to know.
As misery is a shadow.
Am I the shadow?
That’s life will not glow.  

Happiness has burnt out.
Increasing self doubt.
Nothing to care about.
This world can do without.  

Pills in my hand.
Pain you can’t understand.
But this wasn’t planned.
My brain gives the command.  

Dying on the floor.
Crawling towards the door.
Don’t want to die anymore.
But death’s face is something you can’t ignore.

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Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 28th July 2008
The third line would read better if it had been:  
"The reflection is stranger," 
 
The rhyme is interesting, although it only really seems to take off from the third stanza onwards. 
 
I wonder... None of those who succeeded could ever tell about their last moments, yet it is an interesting thing that nearly all religions seem to consider suicide one of the worst things someone could do:  
In Christianity and Islam those who commit suicide are considered to go to hell, according to Buddhism suicide has dreadful implications for one's karma, in Confucianism it's considered very disrespectful towards one's ancestors and so on... It seems that's at least one issue people of all faiths agree upon: Suicide is immoral... (which is logical, considering the pain it causes those who are left behind to mourn).

Written by Orlock (7 comments posted) 28th July 2008
Interestingly, in some contexts, suicide was deemed as an honourable option in ancient Roman society. Van Hoof has written extensively on this subject in Van Hooff, Anton J. L. From autothanasia to suicide : self-killing in classical antiquity. 
 
I am not, for a second, casting a moral judgement on this course of action, by the way, I am merely stating that the above text is a fascinating study in this area.
Correction
Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Uh... I meant 'the reflection A stranger'

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