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Four Senryus
By LynB
28 July 2008
I often find it easier to express my feelings with the written word, rather than by speech.  I wrote these four verses to try and give readers some idea what my life has been like since last September.  Hopefully, things are now on the up! 

How I felt when I found out I had breast cancer

Staring into space
I can’t cry, though I want to
Fear crowding my mind   


How I feel now, nearly a year on

Life is better now
The future full of promise
Stronger every day


To the people who supported me, including my friends on GW – especially Phil, Jean and Oli

Family and friends
Helped me through my darkest days
Thanks and love to all 


How I felt on reading that a young lady on a website I used to post on, has just died from breast cancer, aged just 32

A young life cut short
A rose beginning to bloom
Many hearts broken  

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Written by Brett (1002 comments posted) 28th July 2008
Four Strong Winds - as Neil Young may have said! 
Very heartfelt pieces, Lyn, no cheap sentiment here, the emotion is tangible. I'm glad to hear that you are on the up. That last senryu is very powerful and touching. 
Cheers

Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 28th July 2008
I believe it takes real courage to open up whether spoken or written so good for you. the first stanza stood out for me "fear crowding my mind".  
Take care x

Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 28th July 2008
It is much easier to write these things once and for all as poems, rather than to try to explain them face to face. A lovely series of senryus, and finishing off positive and hopeful for yourself, while remembering that some people are not so lucky. 
 
Over half the women who get breast cancer these days survive it. Long may the odds improve.

Written by Phil (7005 comments posted) 28th July 2008
Hi Lyn. Brave pieces - and well put. As mentioned above - and by yourself, it's probably easier and possibly more exact to express this in verse than any other form. Lovely set. 
 
Hope things are still on the up. 
 
Phil
Less is more
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 28th July 2008
With your spirit the cancer never really stood a chance. You came across so clearly in these verses and expressed yourself so well. It's amazing how much you can pack into such a small verse; every word is telling. An object lesson in how less is more. 
Impressive 
jane

Written by fellpony (1751 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Good to see you back and posting, Lyn. A fine set of senryu.

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