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my breasts( warning: rude)
By punchy
29 July 2008
I thought we should move away from rears and upwards!
 Sorry, this would be better written on a toilet wall but I don't do graffitti( can't spell it either)



My breasts disappointingly flat
They resemble the bites from a gnat
But a fulcrum type hold
and they stand out quite bold
       Thus creating a warmth in my tw..   
Embarassed

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Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Oh ho ho and thrice ho! 
 
I've just exploded with such a violent guffaw that breaking wind is putting it mildly! 
 
What a last line - though I would humbly point out that you're moving forwards rather than 'upwards', unless you write limericks while flat on your back? Oh forgive me! 
 
Stupendous! We need more like this to dilute, if that's the word, some of the heavier stuff - not that I'm anti heavy stuff at all. 
 
Oh, and your spelling of 'graffiti' as 'graffitti' makes it delightfully rhyme with 'titty'! 
 
I weep - marvellously funny! 
 
You've made my day! Oh goodness, I've got to interview someone shortly and now don't know if I can keep a straight face. Help! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Phil (7007 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Wonderful. Like John, laughing out loud. Prey I never grow up. 
 
Phil
Fabulous, Paula
Written by Brett (1002 comments posted) 29th July 2008
A third one laughing like a loon. What a bunch of happy perverts we are! 
Cheers

Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Add me please. :grin  
 
Regards, 
TT
Added, TT!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 29th July 2008
I greatly admire your writing, though I must get round to reading and reviewing more of it! 
 
Let's have a naughty limerick from you soon! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John (aka Fallulah)

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