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John's Kink
By Phil
29 July 2008
Something to go with his odd balls!

The kink in John’s ding - disconcerting
When things go beyond talk and flirting.
Were it not for the eye
On the end of his guy
He wouldn’t know where he was squirting.

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Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 29th July 2008
That is so funny,I nearly pee'd x
Hysterical, Phil.
Written by Brett (1002 comments posted) 29th July 2008
You don't often come out with them, but when you do... 
Stunning use of the word 'squirting' that should keep me smiling all night. 
Cheers
Oh Joy!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Superb! Ha! Ha! Ha! 
 
One point. I don't know about YOUR apparatus, but, 
 
I can't see a thing 
Out of MY dingaling! 
 
I had a very similar motorbike accident. In thick fog I went straight on at a T-junction, hitting the bank on the other side at about forty mph. 
 
The force of the impact was such that one of the front forks actually snapped clean in half - and that takes some doing, as you must know. Mind you, the forks were made of 'cast' something or other, unlike modern steel affairs which I don't think could snap like that! 
 
The state of my personal equipment I leave to your imagination . . . 
 
I'm lucky to be alive and still functioning! 
 
Cheers! More please! 
 
John
Hi Phil
Written by jean.day (2387 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Glad to see you writing again - and up to your wacky and very funny material.

Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Hey Phil, good to see you back in the groove. Now keep going, don't stop. This was really funny. John's ding, :grin .  
 
Enjoyed.  
 
Regards, 
TT

Written by TallulahBelle (13 comments posted) 29th July 2008
This is hilarious, really good fun, off to check out poor old John's balls now..!

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