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The Excruciatingly Beautiful Tale Of A Happy Addict
By TallulahBelle
29 July 2008
Conflicting elements of a drug-user's lifestyle


Black shiny terror

Curls around his heart

This child weeps

Within for lost collusion

He tries

To touch a soul with fingertips

All twist away and shudder from his grasp

 

Wretched, cloying hope

Won't hide the masks

His answers fade away

As dust, but one

He throws

Off fear to take a first red bite

The poison tracing lineage on his lips

 

White winged needle

Brings him home at last

Haunted, hated moon of nefarious night

Reflecting dawn of ethereal day

A wondrous joy

Explodes within his heart

Yet snakes of stolen pleasure will not pause

 

Forked black venom

Hisses in his blood

As waking nightmares

Writhe beneath his dreams

A victim or a hero

Smiling now

Sliding into sleep without a sigh

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Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 29th July 2008
It's okay in that there's nothing wrong with it, except I didn't connect. Perhaps there should have been something to make me care about the user in the first place. 
 
Sorry - could be me. 
 
Phil

Written by TallulahBelle (13 comments posted) 29th July 2008
Thanks, Phil. I think I focused mainly on the emotive elements in this poem, but don't want that to be at the loss of connection with readers. I like your solution and will try to work it in.

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