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Poetry
Goddess
By ParadiseLost
30 July 2008
The first line just come to me and then the rest followed. Plus I was speaking to a beautiful woman so I think that helped as well...

You can make the sunset in a blink of a eye.
You can make the rain fall when you cry.
You can make seas part just for you.
You can make men do what want them to do.
You can make the word love have your name.
You can make the queen knight you a dame.
You can make people call you a goddess.
You can make faith and put it into the faithless.
You can make this world spin to please yourself.
You can make the terminally ill have perfect health.
You can make me willingly give you my heart.
You can make me believe that we will never part.
You can make me fly away to another place.
Because I will be happy, if I just see your face. 

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Written by KaydieKate (75 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
I know the "You can make...'s" were intentionally repeated, but they didn't have to be so. I think it would still work if you removed them past line one.  
 
But this poem has a certain flow in itself. I liked it; an accurate observation of a beautiful woman's power.

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