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| By LESMC1 | ||||||||
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Trying to write a light hearted tale about tournament poker. Very new to writing of any kind and I am looking for pointers. INT. Mr Patel's mini mart liverpool- day Mr PATEL, middle aged, stern looking, Indian with overtones of Liverpudlian, is busy stocking shelves. MR PATEL You know I should just sack you on the spot. SAM, female, Age 26, wearing standard shop overall, is sitting at the till and smiles at Mr Patel. SAM I know, I know, I just need a bit more time to get my act together. Sam looks a bit more positive. MR PATEL It's three years since you left University. You know what they say, "If you don't use it you lose it". SAM True, but tonight may change all that. Mr Patel laughs and shakes his head. MR PATEL I don't think online poker is the answer. Sam takes a folded piece of paper out of her overall pocket and hands it to Mr Patel who proceeds to read aloud in a patronising/slightly mocking tone. MR PATEL (CONT'D) Free Roll! You have been chosen. As one of our most valued players we are offering you the chance to become our sponsored professional for one year. The package will include two thousand pounds into your account, entry into twenty major European tournaments and a salary of forty thousand pounds plus all expenses. Mr Patel folds the paper and hands it back to Sam. MR PATEL (CONT'D) Yeah! You have been chosen along with about two thousand other mugs. Sam looks a bit miffed. SAM For you information it's seven thousand. Anyway, I am past that stage now. I'm in the final ten and the playoff is tonight at seven. So, at worst I have a one in ten shot. Sam serves a customer and leaves Mr Patel time to contemplate her reply. The customer leaves. MR PATEL Last ten you say? No shit! Sam laughs and seems slightly surprised at Mr Patel's language. SAM Yes, and I've never been placed less than third on a final table. Mr Patel tries to hide his excitement. MR PATEL Still got some work to do. You will be up against the best online players in the world. Don't be too upset if you loose. SAM I know the odds, so no worries there. By the mere fact I am at the final table means I am one of the best in the world. Mr Patel can't hide his excitement now. MR PATEL That's true, never thought of it like that. You better take the rest of the day off. You need to be prepared for tonight. I will tell Mrs. Patel to prepare some extra food and you can come to the house after the game. Don't forget. EXT. road with large victorian houses liverpool - afternoon Sam walks along the road and up the steps of a house. She unlocks the front door and enters. Int. hall way - day Sam checks the mailbox marked "flat 1" and takes some junk mail out. She opens her flat door and a cat runs in just ahead of her. Int. Sams flat - day Sam takes off her coat and overall and hangs them behind the door. She puts the kettle on in the split level kitchen and searches for a cup amongst the dirty dishes. Later Sam sitting on the sofa with the cat and watching TV "The Paul O'Grady Show". Sam looks at her watch. SAM Under two hours to go for the chance of a lifetime. Just think in a few hours I could be an international poker player travelling the globe. The cat looks up at her and then carries on watching TV as Olga, Paul O'Grady's dog is on screen. Int. office - eVENING Two people, sitting at the same computer looking impatient. JANE 48 very smartly dressed and head of the Met Serious Crimes Unit. Jane Russ should be here any minute now. The door opens and a slightly flustered Russel 28, scruffy, bit of a geek, looks more like a pro skateboarder than a detective, hurries in clutching a file. Russ Sorry I'm late, had to finish my profiles. JANE Lets get the introductions over. This is Dave Wilson Poker Room Manager. DAVE 50, smartly dressed, offers his hand to Russ who proceeds to wipe his own hand on his jeans before shaking Dave's hand. RUSS Hi Dave, Russ Austin fraud investigation. So who have we got? Dave We have five well known poker circuit players, and two top online players. Russ looks through his file. RUSS Yep, got them. What have you got on the remaining three? DAVE Bill "The fisherman" Smith very aggressive player, tends to risk all if he smells weakness. Profile: Managing Director aged forty five. Int Living room of a council house - same time Bill "The fisherman" Smith a large man in tracksuit bottoms and Celtic football shirt sitting at his computer with a can of larger and a cigarette. RUSS (V.O.) I've got, fat bastard, on the permanent sick and sells contraband tobacco around the local pubs. He has been arrested several time for credit card fraud. INT. OFFICE - same time That revelation has thrown Dave a bit and this time reads from his own file. DAVE Next we have Sean "Enforcer" MacDonald. A very good tactical player and a student of odds. Profile 25, works on the stock market. Hobbies include; kick boxing and women. INT. Living room of a large modern apartment - same time James "Enforcer" MacDonald 25, sits at the dinning table with a glass of wine and observed only from the back. RUSS (V.O.) Almost right. Got a 1st in Theoretical Maths and works as a junior partner in his fathers brokers. Was European junior kick boxing champion. Int. OfFICE - same TIME DAVE Finally we've got Sam "Hit'em low" Brook. He's statistically the best player online except for the fact, he only ever plays very low stake tournaments. He never pays more than $5 for a tournament. He has won $8000 since joining which is very impressive. Profile: Shop worker. Int. small flat living room - same time Sam is frantically trying to get her computer to work, checking wires and switches. RUSS (V.O.) For a start Sam is female, but does work in a corner shop. She is an only child. She dropped out 2 years into her PhD in Behavioral Psychology after her parents were killed in a car crash. SAM Bollocks! Why can't I get on line? Shit! Sam sits at her computer thinking of what the problem could be. Then it slowly dawns on her what the problem is. She frantically searches through an unruly mass of paper on the desk and picks out a dog-eared bill. Sam goes to the phone and dials. SAM (CONT'D) Hi, I've forgot to pay my internet bill is it possible to pay now?... Yes! That's great and will I be online right away?... What! Twenty four hours. Is there no way I can get on now?... She slams the phone down, picks up the cat and her coat from behind the door. SAM (CONT'D) Sorry cat but I've got to go out and so have you. int. Mr PATEL'S house hallway - night 6.45 Pm Mr Patel answers the door as a taxi pulls away. On the door is Sam looking a bit bothered. MR PATEL What are you doing here,you're game starts in 15 minutes? Come in. Sam steps into the hallway and notices a large amount of people in the living room. SAM Sorry, I didn't realise you had company. I'll get off. MR PATEL No, no, it's no problem it's just the wife's relatives. SAM Is it OK if I use your computer, I'm having a few problems with mine. Namely, I forgot to pay my internet rental. Int. MR PATEL'S HOUSE - night Mr Patel leads her through the living-room where about ten people are chatting in English and Hindi and points to an alcove with a computer. MR PATEL Sorry about the location but my sons got the laptop at university. Sam looks a bit embarrassed. SAM Are you sure it's OK? Sam nods and smiles at the guest shyly as she finds her way across the room. MR PATEL You play your game. You may never get this chance again. Mr Patel returns to his guests and starts chatting in Hindi. He gestures towards Sam explaining what is going on. The guests seem very interested and keep glancing over while she downloads the software. INT. Office - NIGHT 7 pm Only two remain in the office, Russ and Dave, who seem a lot more relaxed now that Jane has left. RUSS It boils down to two, Hit'em low and Enforcer. They are the only two who are unknown. DAVE There's also The Fisherman? RUSS You mean fast bastard. I just don't think he would be suitable for what I've got in mind. DAVE True...There off. Looks like Hit'em low is a none starter? RUSS I'm down to one then? She could be just late?.. Fat bastard has gone all in and been called. Dave presses a few keys on the computer so he can see all the players hands. DAVE He's got ace's and the other guy has got ace-queen...Yep he's won. INT. MR PATEL'S HOUSE living room - 7.15 pm The crowed seem to have lost interest in Sam playing poker as she is still not finished downloading the software. Mr Patel comes over to Sam. MR PATEL How's it going? SAM Just launching it now... Yes! Lets see what they've been up to. Only seven players left and a couple have doubled up. Sam's cards are shown face up as always in online poker. MR PATEL Wow! Ace. King. Mrs. Patel, a small middle aged woman, Indian, appears at the side of Mr Patel. MRS. PATEL Wow! Big slick. You going to slow play and hit them on the river or make your move now. Mr Patel seems astonished at his wife's knowledge and Sam laughs. SAM I'm up against The Fisherman and he seems very aggressive. So I think I should just call for now. The flop comes down and a crowed starts forming around the computer. MRS. PATEL What a flop! Ace, ace, king, you've got the nuts. MR PATEL Quiet women, let her play. Where are you getting all this from anyway? MRS. PATEL Poker on TV. I know how the The Devilfish would play this. He would check it to the river. Mr Patel looks up to the heavens. MRS. PATEL (CONT'D) There he goes all in just like Sam predicted. Sam goes all in. Int Living room of a council house - night Bill "The fisherman" Smith is still in his Celtic shirt and looking very smug. His little terrier dog is happy chewing a bone. Bill "The fisherman" Smith Full house, kings over aces. All in I think he's only got an ace. Smugness turns to horror as he sees Sam's two aces and he knows he is beat. The dog looks up and starts to slink away under the table. INT. mR PATEL'S HOUSE living room - 7.15 pm A lot of cheering and clapping from the crowd surrounding Sam. INT. OfFICE - 8.45 pm Dave and Russ are drinking coffee transfixed on the game. Dave Where down to the last four and it looks like it's between your guys. Russ I think the "Enforcer" is going to win with his chip lead. The "cowboy" has just gone all in with a pair of jacks and *Hit'em low" has called with sevens. Int the cowboy's house 8.45 pm The cowboy in his fifties dressed all in black wearing a Stetson and reflective sunglasses. He presses a key on his computer, stands up and starts dancing to the song "Know when to hold'em. Know when to fold'em". Int OfFICE - 8.45 pm RUSS The lucky bitch she's hit her seven. That makes her chip leader. INT the cowboy's house 8.45 pm The cowboy presses another key on his computer and slumps into his chair to the song "I shot the sheriff". INT office 9.30 Russ and Dave sit back in their chairs looking at the computer screen. Russ claps his hands. RUSS Yes! Down to the last two. Could not have dreamed for more, the perfect candidates. DAVE Hit'em has got a pair of two's. Enforcer has got AK. Here's the flop King, Ace, three. Enforcer has checked and is slow playing and Hit'em has made a modest bet. A seven on the turn and they have both checked. Wow! Two on the river and Enforcer has bet three quarters of his stack. The unlucky sod. Hit'em has raised him all in and he's called. We have our winner. Russ ponders for a few moments. RUSS I'll take both of them. I will get my department to pay for "The Enforcer". INT MR PATEL'S HOUSE living room same time There is an hysterical crowd around Sam who is just staring at the computer screen in disbelief. A message comes on the screen "Well played the Enforcer". Sam replies, "thanks, but a bit lucky at the end". Sam gets up from the computer and turns to the crowed in the room and her face lights up as it dawns on her that her life is going to change. Mrs Patel starts dancing around the room and everybody starts joining in except for Mr Patel who looks happy but has a slight doubt niggling at the back of his mind. To be continued....
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