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Alternative world
By meadowcroft1964
02 August 2008


Have you ever laid flat

Among blades of grass 

If you do it won't be long

Before you're in throng 

Natures alternative world 

Carries right on  

Insects and fleas mini beasties

All hurry past

As for them life goes to fast

They all seem to know

Which way to flow so

Supporting others needs

Fodder for birds and bees

Though their existence is brief
 
It's my firm belief

That they has they are
 
Are more fortunate than us

Living by instinct alone

No lack of trust

A second at a time

Knowing total peace of mind

Reviews

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 2nd August 2008
Insects take every minute as it comes and the main elements of their lives are sex, seeking food, survival. Mankind spends his life putting other people into compartments and then judging himnself as to whether he thinks he is in a higher or lower compartment and congratulating himself or otherwise. That's why humans have no peace of mind. End of philosophy lesson!
And the fish . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 2nd August 2008
. . . that live in the sea do not even own clothing. 
 
A line from an Ezra Pound poem, which I've quoted before on GW. 
 
Violet, I think you put the point really strongly! 
 
The question is, as some wretched ancient Greek philosopher put it, "Would you rather be a happy ignorant pig, or a fully conscious suffering human being?" 
 
When I have been in the depths of depression, I would have rather been a simple stone in the road than be my pathetic self. Truly. 
 
But when I have woken to realised the value of life and friendship, I have been glad to be a person. What next? 
 
Who knows? And I say that for all of us . . .  
 
Strength to you Violet! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John XXX

Written by KaydieKate (75 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
I liked the message, though the language at times was a bit simple. I liked the last three lines the best. A good poem.  
 
-Kate

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