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Reluctant Samaritan (bad language advisory!)
By Veronica_Milvus
03 August 2008
This is a bitchy and bitter little poem.  I love my friend dearly but she is always having emotional crises, and I often have to pick up the pieces.  I wrote this after a particularly harrowing day.  It is not very balanced and does not represent everything I feel about her.

I posted it here because I wanted to see how the romantic sonnet form goes with some quite conversational, unromantic and angry language.

RELUCTANT SAMARITAN

It’s all about you, isn’t it, anyway?

You love a chance to play the fucking drama queen

And the supporting cast watch you night and day

In case you work that pills-and-plastic-bag routine.

 

So he’s left you?  Well, can’t say that I’m surprised;

he was just a “friend with benefits” right from the start.

You didn’t love him either, that was undisguised,

but now he’s gone, you say the bastard broke your heart.

 

Forgive me for my bitterness at this sad time;

as it’s me who’s clearing up the shit, I’m short on tact.

To say that you exhaust me shouldn’t be a crime,

but I’d like you to get a grip, and that’s a fact.

 

I’m giving, giving, giving for your sanity’s sake

while you act a little play entitled “take, take, take”.

Reviews
Catharsis?
Written by Katanga (1229 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
This reads like a piece that simply had to be written, in the sense that the frustration and anger bursts out of every line. 
 
As a sonnet? Hmmm! Clearly the rhyme scheme is perfect, bu t the metre is shot to pieces ( I think) - but that works as a reflection of your frustration and 'chaotic' emotions. 
 
Powerful stuff anyway! 
 
I think that staid pentameters deserve a good beating! 
 
Hope all is calmer now? 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
Why does this work, V? It is a sonnet that relys on beats (often alternated) rather than strict metre, the content turns the standard form upon its head. Why does it work? Because of your talent to always rise above and entertain! 
Yes, the bitterness comes through - sometimes quite disturbingly as in the final line of your first stanza - but so does your concern; 'but I'd like you to get a grip, and that's a fact.' There are some friends who can only be talked to this way. 
Top notch as always, V - I think you deserve to treat yourself to a slap up meal or lazy night with wine and chocolates for being such a friend - even better get her to pay! 
Cheers

Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
Apologies, V. Upon rereading this I see what you were aiming for - you still have five beats per line, it's just I didn't see it at first. I should have been lead by your introduction where you state 'conversational' - this is almost like reading a ballad where you lightly skim over words and let the stress fall naturally on those that would be emphasised in speech. 
My fault for not seeing this straight off - excellently done. 
Cheers
Fierce
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
I won't comment on the metrical qualities -- or the rhythm -- because to speak personally on the topic , I have had my own knuckles rapped often enough for my use of a conversational style and the consequent elisions and metric reversals. 
 
The content -- well , it seems to be something that just had to be written , and it certainly has its full effect. Who gives a stuff about whether it is bitter , or whether its form is exact -- they just fit together in a coherent whole 
 
A sonnet does not have to be romantic in tone -- and there is no proscription on the language it can display either -- at least in my opinion. 
 
patterjack

Written by KaydieKate (63 comments posted) 3rd August 2008
It's set up is a sonnet: but it doesn't read like one. But I loved it none the less. It fits, it gives us a clear story and a clear picture: I'm sure we all know someone like this.  
 
Love it.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 4th August 2008
I'm not concerned about its sonnetish qualities - probably because, poetic pleb that I am, I know enough only to say: 14 lines, final rhyming couplet, usually pentameter(?). 
 
It is conversational - and that fits the whole perfectly. In 14 lines you managed to explain the situation, reflect on your friend's behaviour and vent your (not quite simply angry) feelings. Resounding success, I'd say. Thoroughly enjoyed it. 
 
I wonder if your friend has read it? Or is that a step too far? 
 
Phil

Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 4th August 2008
another cracker. 
Don't you just wish people like that would just seek help from a professional therapist rather than draining the life and energy out of there long suffering friends. We all need a shoulder occassionally but I think a girls night out with filthy conversation and jugs of wine works a treat, and everytime someone starts feeling sorry for themselves and harking on then you can just shove a large cork in their mouth :grin

Written by Veronica_Milvus (637 comments posted) 6th August 2008
Thanks all. This was poetry as therapy, and now I am pleased to say that my friend is off the critical list and will be subjected to a regime of "tough love" by me and several other friends who bore the brunt of her latest attention-seeking tantrum. There is a Little Talk we need to have, and some discussion about Cognitive Behavior Therapy. 
 
I have told her that spending the weekend mopping up her tears made me angry and resentful. That is from assertiveness training!

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