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By Toad
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04 August 2008 |
Finding an unlikely new lover, full of both doubt and excitement
Time between our times
jumble you up. But worries
fade when I see you.
Summertime, of course
is when we found each other
ready and waiting |
Written by KaydieKate (75 comments posted) 3rd August 2008 | | I had to read it twice, just to let it sink it. Overall, it's a fine poem. It could use more imagery [of which I am a big fan.] Nice. |
Written by KaydieKate (75 comments posted) 3rd August 2008 | | I had to read it twice, just to let it sink it. Overall, it's a fine poem. It could use more imagery [of which I am a big fan.] Nice. | Very nice
Written by kkforever123 (6 comments posted) 10th August 2008 | | Great poem, I like to add some imaginary or mystical creatures in a haiku because the poem is so short, but with your subject it fit in quite well. Great job, and keep writing. |
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