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The Broken Clock
By Rattle_Spear
07 January 2006

Life is like a Cuckoo clock,

Tick tock tick tock.

When least you expect it,

Time runs out on you!

From day ""one"" when you land on Earth,

The ticking of time is all you're worth!

From the word, ""GO,""

The scars of time will show!

Now you think you're in the drivers seat,

But friend don't let time miss a beat.

You race through life,

With all it's related strife!

Appointments to keep,

Sometimes with only a little sleep.

Various places to go,

Sometimes fast and sometimes slow!

So take advantage and play it cool,

Don't end up being the lonely fool!

Someday soon even at best,

The Cuckoo, my friend, will loose his nest!

Reviews
simple and slightly meaningless
Written by Dark_Red (10 comments posted) 16th February 2006
Although I liked the opening, and the title of this poem, it is a disappointing read. The rhyming scheme is extremely simple (not necessarily a bad thing) and the lines seem to be thrown down anyhow.  
 
i got the idea that you were perhaps writing the lines more to suit what rhymed than the idea you were trying to communicate in that line. 
Another thing I disliked is that you didn't seem to be pursuing a theme or a plot of any kind, which meant the poem lacked any meaning for me. 
Meaningless Thoughts
Written by Rattle_Spear (93 comments posted) 16th February 2006
Great review. 
Hope you don't do it for a living? Everyone would quit writing meaningless poetry. :eek
simple and slightly meaningless
Written by Rattle_Spear (93 comments posted) 16th March 2006
Dark_Red 
Thanks for the comments. 
Please understand that my clock is terminal and is losing its rhymn :grin
Not quite cuckoo enough
Written by Asferthecat (859 comments posted) 15th April 2007
This poem needs more complexity in both its thought and its rhyming scheme

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