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Damage

By meadowcroft1964

14 August 2008

Just some thoughts on verbal abuse and the damage it causes. How untrue is that old saying sticks and stones etc.

Rows and shouts

Constant roundabout

Tongues lashing

Thrashing insults out

Reams of abuse

Violently induced

Constantly drip fed

Vindictively led

There no corners to hide

When fear resides

Clear in the eyes of a child

Peace is denied

Has there they lie

Contemplating suicide

Cruel words

Poison arrows tipped

Aimed to conflict

Maximum pain

Always the same

Heart piercing

Ridicule shame game

Mortal wounds erupt corrupt

All sane hope or confident thought

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Powerful . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 14th August 2008

. . . and disturbing, Violet!

I couldn't agree more, but could never have expressed it as well as you!

Cheers!

John X

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 14th August 2008

I quite agree with you Violet, and with Katanga. "The cruel words, poison tipped" are heartless and only designed to hurt the receiver. How can anyone get a feeling of happiness or satisfaction out of hurting another person? It is the giver of these words to feel sorry for because inside they are rotting and they know it. You have expressed this better than anyone else I know. Congratulations.

Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 14th August 2008

"The cruel words, poison tipped" are heartless and only designed to hurt the receiver.

Yet who decides what is heartless and designed to hurt, as opposed to truth that hurts yet not by design?

I’m sticking my neck out here by suggesting that, for a poem that was written with an ‘important’ message, this is quite badly constructed and, due too poor grammar, does little to get that message across coherently. However, if this (IMO) truth then hurts, am I too be branded a heartless swine or honest fool?

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