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Formula X
By meadowcroft1964
15 August 2008




        
A recipe for the boys if they wish to get the best  from us women
Who agrees that then let them see





 Love fashioned from trust 
 Releases the clutch
 Brakes true passion free
 Lust then steps up a gear
 Fanning the flames higher
So you bath in the warmth of
 Womanly Purest wanton
Unbridled desire

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3559 comments posted) 15th August 2008
Can't argue with that. I liked the car metaphor but think you should have stayed with it in the last 4 lines to make a more complete poem. 
Worth saying,though 
jane

Written by punchy (533 comments posted) 15th August 2008
Neat little piece and very steamy or should I say fueled. 
Great first line. 
x
Not Just For the Boys
Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 15th August 2008
Love fashioned from trust is the keystone to any relationship and is best seen in the love of a dog for his owner. I don't think human love can surpass that. Many look for love but they need also to supply the right ingredients for this from themselves I would say, and this often doesn't happen.
Bottleblondesurfer
Written by meadowcroft1964 (112 comments posted) 15th August 2008
Hi ya Jane  
I've tried to take on board your comments and have come with these changes so instead of last four lines read  
 
Fueling the engines fire 
Revving up higher and higher 
To drive you over the edge  
To climax in ultimate desire  
 
 
Please comment

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3559 comments posted) 15th August 2008
Oh yes that certainly floats my boat. I need to calm down with a gin and tonic after reading that! 
But don' t be guided by me. I'm no poet and others may disagree. 
 
I especially liked the line 
"To drive you over the edge"-- very graphic with shades of Thelma and Louise [my second favourite film] 
 
I think it works better anyway,but would be interested to hear what others say. 
Really wild 
jane

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