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Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 15th August 2008 |
| How true this is Johnny. Time does slow you down, or rather focuses the mind on the fact that time does run out and if there's something you want to do, don't wait too long. |
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 15th August 2008 |
| PS I think that your poem ties in extremely well with the Olympics and the second hand. It is also true to life. Well done!! |
Evolution of mankind...
Written by JohnnyD (106 comments posted) 15th August 2008 |
The poem is more thought provoking about our lives' existence. First we learned to run, as we exploited the animals, we galloped at a fast pace. With modern invention of wheels, we learned speeding from one place to another in no given time and soon we learned to fly... Irrespective of how many inventions and discoveries we humans make, ultimately, God laughs at us because TIME wins hands down with all our modern inventions...
The truth, we often forget in our quest for a better living full of hatred, jealousy, competition and what not... Wish with time, we could learn few important lessons of life...
Johnny D |
Written by mr_soul (126 comments posted) 15th August 2008 |
Ah, another good one JohnnyD! I like the idea you've created here, and your explanation of it was great. Time catches up with everyone in the end. Man wants to get faster and faster, a desperate search to become somewhat invincible. Yet, time, death, gets everyone in the end nomatter what they can do in life. Therefore time is precious and what we do with it is important, mainly trying to avoid some of the seven deadly sins which is a topic of discussion in the children's section at the moment!
Very thought-provoking, you've created a good poem here. Nice one! |
Thank you Mr. Soul!
Written by JohnnyD (106 comments posted) 15th August 2008 |
| I am glad you enjoyed reading and understanding it... |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 15th August 2008 |
I liked the double meaning here with the allusion to speed and of course the irony that we are masters of technology but slaves to nature. I suppose we are all speeding towards the grave, a sobering thought
jane |
Thank you Jane...
Written by JohnnyD (106 comments posted) 15th August 2008 |
Well, I am so happy to know you liked the poem...
Johnny D |
Written by obsidian_amethyst (47 comments posted) 18th August 2008 |
Good personification. I loved it.
(Basically I am a young writer who can't add anything the others have because I have no idea how to evaluate poetry)
OA |
OA Evaluate poetry from your heart...
Written by JohnnyD (106 comments posted) 18th August 2008 |
Thank you OA... Always remember, in India great poets (Hindi and other local languages and dialects) are known for touching chords with their readers with the overflowing emotions in their words. Be it great poets like KABIRDAS, SURDAS, TULSIDAS, RABINDRANATH TAGORE (he wrote in English and Bangla) and many others... eveybody had their own style and readers love their work because they always wrote from their heart.
What a child or young people can interpret, adults may not connect at all. So never under-estimate your understanding. Evaluate a poem from your heart and try to understand why the poet has written and imagine at what condition s/he must have written the said poem... You will see, how easy it is to evaluate then...
I do hope I have been helpful to you OA...
(P.S: I would like you to read my poem BUBBLE and let me know from your point of view as to why it is the highest (16050 + hits) and maximum read poem on this site? - I will really appreciate if you will make me understand why it is so popular as I have really failed to understand why readers love the poem so much.)
All the very best! Take care.
Johnny D |
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