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Poetry
Little.
By Reynaerde
17 August 2008

Little man
on the road
Little man
Lost abode
By the river
and the sea
On your knees
beg and prey
for mercy

Little Gods
In the sky
In your arrogance
My, oh my
Have you followed the news?
I think not, Lordly bemused
Methinks you don't know
the age of Greeks
Has long come and go
the Romans dead
the Mayans passed
The Gods of men
Are few to the last

Little man
Dearly arrogant
Little man
Dearly intransigent
Perhaps one day
you will see
this isn't God
Merely me.

Little Gods, I won't listen
Little Gods, I won't think.
Little Gods, I'll go swimming.
In the water will I sink.

Little man, please hold back
by the canyon and the gorge
Don't go in, you won't float
by that perilous water moat


Little Gods, telling lies

Listen man, please be wise

In your big, palatial skies.

Spinning truths, deceit and lies.

Can't you see the bodies rise?

I won't listen

Never will

I shall swallow the bitter pill

Can't you see?
The shallow graves?
Bloated
and afloat
so many fallen souls
Can't you see the screaming faces?
Can it be you do not know?

Know?
I do, for sure.
Beyond this river lies the cure
A life of sadness, woe
The voices- they never go
So I'll close my eyes and leap


We beg you
stay your feet

Won't listen
Never have


To the little Gods on high.

Won't listen
Never did.


To the voices in your head.
To the voices in my head.

Now then
Close your eyes
and together
we'll say die.

Reviews

Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 17th August 2008
Quite effective. I got a little lost with the rhythms that came and went and changed. Had a feel of a Greek chorus, perhaps. Lots to like - could be a little tighter. 
 
Phil

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