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Poetry
Cindy-Lou
By MattHews
17 August 2008

 This is one of a number of verses I wrote when working in Florida as a 'visiting professor'of English language communications and British literature! The collection is called American Pie and the sub-title of the verse is Victim of a False Hunk.

     

The Ballad of Cindy-Lou (Victim of a False Hunk

Cindy-Lou was a cute young kid
Till she go she got laid by Big Boy Sid:
"Oh, he's such a hunk!" she said,
Before he had her in his bed.

Six months gone, they moved away -
Someplace right down Hicksville way.
Five brats later an' gone to seed,
Poor Cindy-Lou's in dire need -
Big Boy Sid is a big fat slob
(Might earn a buck with a lil' odd job)
But mostly they live on the ol' Welfare,
An nobody really has a care (do you?)
For poor, fat-gutted Cindy-Lou.



Reviews

Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 17th August 2008
Ah, romance is not dead! 
 
I see why you and Katie get along so well. 
 
Good, fun verse. 
 
Phil
Fat-gutted?
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 17th August 2008
Oh yes - that is an inspired hyphenated collocation! 
 
Welcome, Malcolm! 
 
Superb first piece . . .  
 
Phil - how did you suss that Malcolm is who he is? 
 
Cheers! 
 
Katie X

Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 17th August 2008
It's in his profile, Tallulah-Babes. I usually have a quick gander before reviewing someone for the first time.
Pretty sussed . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 17th August 2008
. . . are you, Phil! 
 
Well-spotted! 
 
I still rate the rhyme though . . .  
 
Cheers! 
 
John X
Cindy loves y'all!
Written by MattHews (45 comments posted) 18th August 2008
Sequel
Written by MattHews (45 comments posted) 18th August 2008
Big Boy Sid got shot in a bar-room brawl.

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