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Cornflowers Blue and Poppies Red
By grace
19 August 2008

Lost among the meadow flowers,

love whispers.


Harvested

by spirit hand

to drift on sorrow's breeze,


he moves,



through cornflower blue

and poppies red,

in search of

true love strayed.


She stands,

where love lies quiet

and through

a veil of tears,


in meadow close

where soft air stirs,



she notes a gentle sway,


of cornflowers blue


and poppies red.







Reviews

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 19th August 2008
Grace, I have to tell you that I love metre in poetry, as everyone knows and your poem lacks it, but I love the images that you have portrayed in your poem and the combination of the blue cornflowers and the poppies is also lovely. I like the little verbal phrases you have peppered all through your poem too. Lovely.

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 20th August 2008
Hello Josie, 
 
thank you very much for your kind comments.  
 
I write a lot of poetry with metre in mind but as you say not this. I'm just very pleased that you enjoyed this, thank you again. 
 
Pamx

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 20th August 2008
I can see why your login name is grace. There is something very graceful about your writing. I like the first half about the man better, very gentle and atmospheric. The reference to harvest was poignant for me, as if to liken love to sowing and reaping. The second half didn't work as well for me. It didn't seem to carry me along as the first half, and 'a veil of tears' felt a little melodramatic. But on the whole it thought it was lovely. 
 
Mia 8)

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