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Museum Garden
Written by fellpony
19 August 2008
I'm reposting this as we moved offices this week, and I am already missing the enclosed garden, the catalpa tree and the kids taking part in the holiday activities offered by the Museum...

Children were playing,
families talked;
cloistered in stone,
the students walked;
in the garden I sat alone.
Count to a hundred,
hide and freeze,
“ready or not”
under autumn trees;
October sun,
golden and hot.
The Roman road
stretched itself
under our feet,
kindly, a gleaming
grassy street.
A little child, dreaming,
studied catalpa leaves,
paper-bag brown,
the cherry’s flushed gold
lightly showering down –
the leaf in each fist
a wonder untold –
measured and confident,
came to my side
and with joy in his eyes
gave me autumn’s pride,
turning fallen leaves
to a matchless prize.
They line the paths today
under the rains,
but generous yesterday
remains.

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Written by Brett (2419 comments posted) 19th August 2008
seems to be a rarity in the forum these days, but this is wonderful. 
There are some lovely lines and the poem is not without its humour ('hide and freeze'). 
 
'the leaf in each fist/a wonder untold' 
 
Aah. 
 
And I love the form and the rhyme scheme. 
Those last four lines are a perfect closing read literally or metaphorically. 
Much enjoyed. 
Cheers
Simply stopped . . .
Written by Katanga (4169 comments posted) 19th August 2008
. . . me in my tracks of roaming around GW. 
 
'paper-bag brown . . . a wonder untold' 
 
This moves so well from almost mundane everyday images to sublime eternal musings, and yes, the last four lines are wonderful. 
 
I re-read it several times to hold the picture in my mind - and here it remains, beautiful. 
 
Gosh! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 19th August 2008
Lovely. Really lovely. I feel I was sitting there myself. The boy in the poem is just like my boy. My boy picks up big red-brown leaves from the autumn streets, and presents them to me as an offering of pride. Beautiful. 
 
Mia :)

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (5077 comments posted) 19th August 2008
I think one of the things that good poetry can do that prose can't quite match is to capture and hold a memory and keep it alive. As in this piece it's like the reality of the garden is here in the poem; while you've got this you've always got your garden in some way. It is so vividly and succinctly expressed. It's something that everyone can identify with even if they don't have the ability to capture their own precious memory as clearly as this. 
cheers 
jane
As vivid and wonderful
Written by Talisker (1367 comments posted) 20th August 2008
as a perfect photograph. They say a picture is worth a thousand words - for me this disproves that cliche, this is worth a few dozen pictures. 
 
Thanks 
 
Oli :)

Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 20th August 2008
Not much to add, Sue. Loved the last - as everyone else seems to have done. 'Vivid' just about does it - visually and with that hard to quantify emotional link. 
 
Phil
quick and moving
Written by footy (39 comments posted) 20th August 2008
thoughts: 
+: form moves it quickly and smoothly, rhyme works very well, great images, last 4 lines are excellent 
-: very little to improve on. 
 
Overall: excellent poem 
 
footy

Written by grace (298 comments posted) 21st August 2008
The imagery in this is stunning and you weave words as a beautiful tapestry. I agree that the last four lines are perfect but then so is the whole poem, 
 
thank you for sharing, 
 
Pamx

Written by Lizzy (970 comments posted) 27th September 2008
Found this through your link of favourite postings, glad I did. Very descriptive and seems to capture the moment beautifully. 
Lizzy

Written by Fledermaus (4146 comments posted) 29th September 2008
Aren't old gardens great places? Somehow I do consider them quite romantic. Perhaps because I had my first real kiss in one? Or perhaps just because they radiate a certain timeless peace. 
Your poem does get that feeling across nicely.

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