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By grace
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20 August 2008 |
This is a poem written for my mother who had dimentia prior to her death and based on a true incident.
The path beckoned her,
to weave among the scented colour,
where bees hummed on nectar quest
and insects climbed to lofty leaves
in green delight.
The sun warmed her,
with solar rays of gentle heat,
from azure sky where swallows soar
on delta wings and larksong rings
in meadow air.
The peace soothed her,
in nature's world of simple truth,
confusion slipped from muddled thought
and hid from tired and worried mind
behind a smile.
The world found her,
it offered safety's gloomy cloak,
to wear 'neath medication's rule
and asked how passed the recent hours. . .
she told them. . .
"I was dancing with roses."
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Written by Robru (272 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | I give full marks for this lovely poem. I am taken with the last line: "I was dancing with roses". With a bit of luck I will be 'dancing with roses 'in my garden this summer. Cheers Bob | Written by grace (173 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | Thank you so much Bob, good to meet you. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this and I wish you lots of sunshine to enjoy your roses, Gracex | Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | A touching piece with an easy rhythm. Phil | Brilliant! Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | I can see this woman 'in nature's world of simple truth.' 'Safety's gloomy cloak' is a stark but powerful phrase. And of course that last line - magical. Very touching. As Phil has mentioned - nice rhythm. Cheers | Written by grace (173 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | Phil and Brett, thank you both very much indeed for your generous comments, Gracex | great Written by footy (38 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | my thoughts: +: technically well crafted and balanced, emotionally profound -: some possible cliched language overall: a great poem I agree. footy | Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | | I loved the last line. | Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | I found this so soothing, and it made me wonder about the people who suffer dimentia. I wonder if they see and experience more beauty the world has to offer in their lucid moments than the rest of us. Mia | Dancing. . . Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | . . . with roses. This , for me, is one of the most moving pieces I've seen on GW. Because it is beautifully written, no more , no less . . . I echo the above comments . . . John | Written by 1211kellie (177 comments posted) 20th August 2008 | A beautiful poem. Thank you. Kellie | Written by grace (173 comments posted) 21st August 2008 | Footy, Veronica, mia, Katanga and kellie, thank you all so much for your thoughtful and generous comments which I appreciate more than I can say. I will gratefully heed your warning of cliche` Footy' Sincerely, Pamx
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