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Goodnight Albert
By grace
20 August 2008

Hello Albert, is that you,

if it is dear, do come through.

I thought I heard the back door latch,

I should have put it on the catch.


I'm sitting cosy by the fire,

the telly's on. . . a male voice choir.

Do excuse the socks and scarf,

they keep me warm but make folk laugh.


I had ham and egg for tea,

not much you know, it's far from free,

but Pension day is nearly here

and then I'll have a pork chop dear.


No I haven't seen our Bert,

he's busy dear, he has to work

and Carol has a lot to do,

so chances to see her are few.


I'm OK, I sometimes see

the girl next door at twenty three.

She checks that I'm still 'of this world,'

that I'm not dead with all toes curled.


Don't get fussed, I only jest,

at least she checks, it's for the best.

There's no-one else since you passed on,

I miss you so much now you're gone.


We have our chats dear, of a kind,

bit one sided, never mind.

At least I can pretend you're here

it helps, imagining you near.


Well, I think it's time for sleep,

before I break and start to weep.

Come with me Albert, tuck me in,

and thank you dear for everything.


Reviews

Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 20th August 2008
I read this several times before deciding to post a review. 
Not that I needed to reread it to know if it was a good poem or not, it is, but to try and work out why I like it so much. I'm not (or I hope I'm not) of a sentimental disposition, but then this poem could so easily have slipped into maudling sentimentality, but you have avoided that very skillfully with the everyday details of the mundane - the socks and scarf, ham and egg, pension day. All these details made it so much more believable. 
I like this very much. 
Cheers

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 20th August 2008
Thank you so much for such thoughtful comments, I'm so pleased that the poem came across as I had hoped. 
 
With appreciation, Gracex
Grace
Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 20th August 2008
I have fathomed it out! It must be the male voice choir that beckoned this simple Welsh boyo! 
Cheers

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 20th August 2008
I found this very moving. Like Brett said, it is not sentimental at all. Actually it is quite entertaining, and yet I'm left feeling this heartache for the woman in the poem as she goes to sleep. I think we need more poems about people who are marginalised in life because of old age, handicap or whatever, so we become aware of the greater human story all around us beyond the young and beautiful. Lovely. 
 
Mia 8)
Too much . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 20th August 2008
. . . from the heart for me to review. 
 
No disrespect in that - I'm in tears. 
 
John X
Having wiped . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 20th August 2008
. . . the tears away, I will say that it's a very well written poem! 
 
I rest in the last line. 
 
Cheers! 
 
John XXX

Written by 1211kellie (177 comments posted) 20th August 2008
This was indeed a very good poem. I love your style of writing! 
 
 
Kellie

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 20th August 2008
mia_ms_kim, katanga and kellie, 
 
thank you all so very much for your thoughtful and generous comments, they mean a great deal to me, 
 
very sincerely, 
 
Pamx

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 20th August 2008
Just to say folks, my real first name is Pam and Grace my second, so I will no doubt slip occasionally and become either. :)  
 
It's to do with being old you know! :grin  
 
Gracexx
Great Poem
Written by Flexy5000 (7 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
Well Pam or Grace you write wonderfully so keep it up. 
 
This piece is amazing and I love it. 
 
Good work

Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
I think this is a wonderful poem. The casual voice (at least until the last stanza) seems to contrast sharply with the cruel reality. I can probably only echo what the others above have already said: It's indeed amazingly wonderful.

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
Hello Flexy and Fledermaus, 
 
thank you so much for your very generous thoughts on this which are very much appreciated. I'm so pleased the poem works for you, 
 
thank you again, Pamx

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