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Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
No need to feel small, PP. And this isn't rubbish either.
But I think that everything's funny
See humour in things that are sick
- Me too!
You're not thick, you are creative.
On a slightly off topic note: many of your pieces have made me laugh - that's a gift.
Phil |
Phil
Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
Thankyou, you are sweet. you talk shit though 
Funny , when my daughter draws on the furniture and looks all sorry, I always say it's ok honey, you can't help being creative. xxx |
Powerfully expressive!
Written by solst (34 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
This was a powerfully expressive poem, cramming so much character in it. The narrator came across sombre and sincere with some joviality in there too.
The rhyme was pretty good, with only a few glitches that kind of slapped me in the face.
I know I have depth and have feeling
My heart is quite open ,romantic
The repeated have is a weight, I think...
I did enjoy it though, I often feel the same way. |
Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
| Me, talk shit? I'm sober this evening too! |
You are . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
. . . 'special, respected, creative and tall', for me at least, and I know for many others here.
Phil does not talk shit.
Try not to be so down on yourself . . .
Mind you, I do like, 'A carcrash of poetic dung'.
You are not silly . . .
We all feel small and silly sometimes . . .
No problem. Look at my arsehole bollocks!
Cheers!
John XXX |
Written by solst (34 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
| look at my arsehole bollocks is the funniest thing I read tonight......ha ha ha ha h ah a |
Or are you . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
. . . totally tongue-in-cheek?
If so, good on you!
If not, as above . . .
Cheers again!
John X |
Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
Phil, you don't talk shit but I can't take a compliment so I threw out an insult, thats cos i'm deep me!!
John: arsehole bollocks? explain, do your bollocks come out of your arse hole, is that some form of prolapse. I have a friend who's bowel came out her fanny! |
Cripes!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
I may have a prolapsed soul . . .
But it's not half as painful as what your friend must have been through . . .
John |
John
Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
Arsehole bollocks
A sad demise
And how John struggles
to disguise
This sad yet odd
Physical glitch
Now poor John knows
That life's a bitch
The good news is
They can be cured
And John I know
Is reassured
That one large squeeze
An inward pop
Those arsey balls
Are turned to slop
xxxx |
Just popped . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
. . . them back in, thanks to your sound advice above!
My speedos will have to work overtime on holiday!
Cheers Paula!
John XXX |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
I'm no poet so if I say I liked it it won't be such a compliment so you won't have to reject it
Anyway I'm really impressed with it. There were some great lines
"A carcrash of poetic dung" - brilliant!
If you see that appearing in one of my reviews of some poets work you'll know I pinched it from you.
And if you can write stuff like this then you are special, silly but special
You can be both
cheers
jane |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 21st August 2008 |
I really enjoyed this one. I think you speak for many people, punchy. I'd like to believe I am a deep and meaningful, tortured and wise soul - except that stuff wouldn't come out of me. Because really I am quite shallow!!! And I can't write poetry, I can only read other's people's poems. It's so sad.
Mia  |
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 22nd August 2008 |
Oh dear Punchy,
goodness knows what you're going to call me, because I'm going to tell you that I think this poem is great!
Big words are no good to a poet if they have no idea how to put them together and you've just done that perfectly.
"Thick" is just about the last word I'd use to describe you and although I've only just joined, I shall be looking out for your work because I know I'll enjoy it.
Forgive me  Pamx  |
Paula you poet!
Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 22nd August 2008 |
'But I think that everything's funny' - Christ, don't berate yourself for that - celebrate the fact.
This is a very good and honest poem, and for the record
not only are you 'respected, creative, and tall' but revered on this site by some - who else could have penned 'Lady Boofs'?
And of course Phil talks shit - that's what makes him the most consistent reviewer we have!
Cheers |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 23rd August 2008 |
You are not thick, just because you can write funny poetry! However, one does not want to be typecast. I do a bit of folk singing as a party piece and my friends always want me to sing the comic songs when I want to do the beautiful romantic ballads... it is annoying.
And as for the material from your past - well, write it if you think you need to, but there are lots of things you could write about that aren't scatalogical but not too deep and serious either, just your observations about every day life. That line about your daughter drawing on the furniture would make a good poem, I think. |
Written by Lizzy (838 comments posted) 23rd August 2008 |
What a great poem, with lots of depth. I think that most writers are very insecure and are only proud of a very few peces of work. I think your reviews should tell you that you are a poet and have written something to be proud of.
Lizzy |
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