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Wrath
By grace
22 August 2008
My first ever attempt at writing for children, so please forgive me if it isn't right.

WRATH


Imagine something precious

disappeared without a trace

and that it had been stolen,

something you could not replace.


Wrath describes the feeling

that would bubble deep inside,

the need to punish someone

for the tears that you have cried.


It's not a happy feeling

and it won't do any good,

it's best that you let go of wrath,

if you believe you could.


Remember when you're naughty,

how the grown ups face goes red

and when you've been forgiven

how they smile at you instead.


It means they have let go of wrath,

not easy, but it's best.

To hold on to your anger

makes you sad and spoils your rest.


Sometimes life is most unfair,

so do try then to say,

what's horrible is past and gone,

tomorrow's a new day!







Reviews

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 22nd August 2008
Absolutely excellent Pam. There is a place for anger though, but knowing not to overstep that mark. Great. Children would understand this very well.
I agree with Joise!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 22nd August 2008
Superb! Very well constructed and you illustrate the concept with concrete examples that children will understand. 
 
Have all the deadly sins now been 'done'?! 
 
More please, Pam! 
 
John

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 22nd August 2008
Thank you so much Josie and John for you kind and encouraging comments, very much appreciated, 
 
Pamx

Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 22nd August 2008
Crikey, another cracker. Beautifully done x
Hello Grace,
Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 27th August 2008
Having been away from GW for a few months, this is the first of your writing I've seen. 
I have to say it is excellent, for any child will understand it. 
 
 
Hello audrie
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 28th August 2008
if I may say, welcome back! 
 
Thank you very much indeed for your kind comments, I'm so pleased you feel this works, 
 
sincerely, Pamx :)

Written by 1211kellie (177 comments posted) 29th August 2008
Wonderful - thought you expressed this sin very well. 
 
Kellie xx

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