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Customs and Excise Quickie 2
By Paul&Mark
12 January 2006

One of a few scenarios and characters we are playing with at the moment so any comments or recommendations would be greatly appreciated


NIGHT - CUSTOMS AND EXCISE CCTV CONTROL ROOM BASED AT CHANNEL TUNNEL

CUSTOMS AND EXCISE CCTV OPERATOR SAT AT CONSOLE WITH OTHER OFFICERS AROUND THE ROOM

CCTV OPERATOR SITS UP IN SEAT AND SHOUTS TO OTHERS IN THE ROOM

We got some runners!

OTHER OFFICERS CLAMBER BEHIND THE CCTV OPERATOR TO GET A LOOK AT THE SCREEN WHILST PUTTING ON OVERCOATS AND HATS ALL SHOUTING TO THE CCTV OPERATOR

I'll take the one in the tracksuit!

I'll have the one in the long coat!

I'll have the one with the beard!

SECONDS PASS WITH ALL OF THE OFFICERS STARING AT THE CCTV SCREEN MOMENTS LATER THE THREE RUNNERS REACH A HOLE IN THE FENCE - ONE OF THE CUSTOMS OFFICERS SHOUTS WITH DELIGHT

I've Won! Come on, give me the money!

ALL OTHER OFFICERS LOOK DEJECTED AND REACH FOR POCKETS AND WALLETS

 

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small point
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 20th February 2006
This is better than your others I think lads, but maybe lose the guards putting their hats & coats on if they're not gonna chase them? 
 
Maybe they could rush out, apparantly to chase them after saying their lines, but instead rush to view it on a larger TV screen? 
 
Just a humble opinion.

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