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Public sympathy
By punchy
22 August 2008
Inspired by one of those gossip mags that I never buy apart from the one that inspired me!Embarassed



How can I share this inner pain
And use it for financial gain
I'll cry and wail and shout it out
Until I get my fame
 
With everyman I meet I'll flirt
Without a care I'll lift my skirt
I'll party harder than the rest
Until my liver hurts
 
I'll look disturbed in desperate need
I'll cut my arms until they bleed
I'll turn the tabloids inside out
Until I get my feed
 
The pain I have I'll share with you
And make the whole world suffer to
I'll hang myself in public space
Until you see me blue
 
And when I'm gone You'll all feel bad
You'll wish that you had known, how sad
And I will gain from this revenge
 
Until the life I had?
 

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Written by Veronica_Milvus (794 comments posted) 23rd August 2008
Punchy - witty and acerbic, great stuff and very true! It's just the last line that I didn't get. 
 
I particularly liked: 
 
"I'll hang myself in public space  
Until you see me blue" 
 
I wonder what it is about celebrities that makes them want to degrade themselves in public. Attention-seeking gone mad. 

Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 23rd August 2008
Paula - this one had me chuckling. Those two opening lines sum up the sickening celebrity culture of today. 
 
Like V, I also was thrown by the closing line. 
 
Still enjoyed, though. 
Cheers

Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 23rd August 2008
Thankyou VM and Brett, I can empathise slightly with the tortured celebrity attention seeking souls, but only the ones with talent. 
The last line is meant to confuse, it is a questioning of the purpose of one taking their life for fame and revenge when but no longer having a life. I should maybe have put a comma or space before "had". 
Cheers peops xxx

Written by Josie (2945 comments posted) 23rd August 2008
How true your words are. People often use pain for financial gain. So why don't people recognize whiners? Many people act "tortured" and are attention seeking just to get a turn out of sympathy don't they but most people see through it immediately. The last line isn't clear Punchy - can't you change it?

Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 23rd August 2008
Cuttingly witty. It's tempting to say these people get all they deserve, in the end.  
 
Phil

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 24th August 2008
Hard to believe that people would harm themselves or sell their souls for fame, yet it happens. They are of course victims of this crazy new world we live in. 
 
You capture that so well here,  
 
Pamx

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