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Bemused
There exists that distant country of the mind
wherein I no longer dare to travel.
There, Ariadne's thread would soon unravel
and The Minotaur awaits my personal kind
who know that they should never make their way
into the labyrinth, dismissing all circumspection
full confident theirs will be the right direction
no matter what much wiser counsels say.
So why do I, and those others, not desist
from pushing, torchless, into encompassing gloom,
helpless to avoid an eternal, pointless, doom
which, dark within those dark coils, must exist?
Is it the siren call of creatures waiting there
echoing, echoing, in caverns of despair? |
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 24th August 2008 | Hi Patterjack,
I imagine the MC in this excellent poem has ignored or failed to recognise all logic and good advice, the result of which has immersed them in a seemingly hopeless depression.
I apologise if I'm wrong but regardless, I 'enjoyed' this excellent piece of writing,
Pamx | Thank you for the review
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 24th August 2008 | I am glad you made your interpretation known to me and I thank you for your kind words about my execution of the work
patterjack.
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Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 24th August 2008 | Crikey, Brian. You must have the fastest thumbs in Oz!
There's always a richness to work that draws (well) on ancient myths. That it's my favourite myth: full of ideas, possibilities, fate, beginnings and endings, adds an extra layer of intellectual engagement. (Hark at me!  )
Dark, like the story, and perversely persevering with a dangerous course, like the story.
Is it not the case that we are often drawn to that which is most dangerous to us? I often think the essence of being human is locating ourselves on the edge of something - that's when we're most alive - and probably most at risk.
I could go on - but I feel I've waffled enough. You can probably tell I rate this - very highly.
Excellent piece - thoroughly enjoyed.
(There are other edges )
Phil | Dark place
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 24th August 2008 | The idea of the labyrinth as a metaphor for a depressed state is such a powerful and scary one that I felt quite uncomfortable reading this.
I found this quite unsettling for a number of reasons. The image of that dark labyrinth is quite haunting, especially as a distant place in the mind. And, of course the labyrinth is impossible to get out of. It feels a truly terrible place to get trapped in
And what is worse, it seems here that you are choosing the path of despair, which is odd as it suggest some power and choice and usually that situation is marked by helplessness and powerlessness; at least in my experience.
People usually feel they find themselves in that dark place against their choosing. Who are the kind of people who would choose that?
I am so intrigued to know what that siren call could be to darkest despair. Can the thought of despair be in some way enticing?
That is a thought I would rather not dwell on in my present state
I’ll just say this is a powerful and deeply unsettling piece. If you’re there, Brian I hope you’ve left a paper trail.
Will email soon
jane
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Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 24th August 2008 | An intriguing piece, Brian (and thank you for your email!).
I am sure there are undercurrents to this that I am ignorant of, but I do like Phil's observation of manking being personally drawn to his dark side (and I don't mean any of that Star Wars cache).
Enjoyed (if that's the right word) and shall certainly reread.
Cheers | Thanks Phil , Jane , Brett
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 24th August 2008 | As always your comments are appreciated .
It was what I call an accreted piece , slowly built over a long period , with many mood variations felt during the writing .
I acknowledge the phrase distant country of the mind as taken from a conversational remark made by my wife . Quite a Muse!
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