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Poetry
Masks
By patterjack
25 August 2008
Not something I have taken seriously, so have put it, at least for the moment, in Play Room.

Now  here in Poetry


                                       Masks

       I've made many masks for fun throughout the years:
       extremes for the chorus in their ritual chanting,
       the painted clown with the carefully situate tears,
       the satyr's mask with its lustful rictus panting.

       Rarely though have I put them to any use.
       I have never really felt the need to hide.
       What you see is what you get;  I refuse
       to take concealment behind a mask of pride.


       Fear not.  I hear your mocking laughter,
       your disbelief that what I told is truth.
       To me the liar's quinsy you'd bequeath
       that, masks made, I never used them after
       and claim that I have deceived myself since youth              
       and should tear off the mask, to show the skull beneath .

Reviews

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 25th August 2008
What a shock ending! First time I read this, I laughed out loud. Second time, it felt sobering. Now I don't know what to think. Will revisit when I have my computer back. (I'm using my hubby's computer - feels like I'm trying to walk in his shoes. Very uncomfortable.) 
 
Mia :x

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 25th August 2008
I've decided that I really like poems with lines that run over the rhyme. It's got a rhyming scheme that always makes me feel more at home with it but it also has a strong narrative drive and a great "flow" that makes it feel more dramatic 
There's something defiant about this, even if the end does stop you in your tracks 
I think this forum could provoke some really interesting work if this is anything to go by. 
jane

Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 27th August 2008
I've worn the masks too often, so this makes uncomfortable reading. 
 
Now I think I'm at last naked-faced - though I'm not sure I like what I see in the shaving mirror. 
 
Thought provoking. 
 
Oli

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 27th August 2008
We all wear masks, don't we? I think we have to, we can't possibly be the same to everyone we meet. It may well make us hypocrites, but then we all are. 
 
How many times have we praised people, 'Oh, that hat is lovely on you,' when we thing it looks ghastly. That's just being kind, but it's not honest. 
 
The masks save us from being cruel, but can also turn us into something we are not. We have the choice of the good or evil masks we wear.

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 28th August 2008
I think I know why the ending was shocking for me on many levels. Whether the accuser is correct or not in his suspicion, the possibility that one could be a 'skull' beneath any mask, is shocking. It particularly stands out because of the masks of rich human emotion and experience are listed in the 1st stanza. 'skull' suggests emptiness, nothingness, absence of reality - or even anti-humanness or anti-reality - beneath all that drama.  
 
It also makes me rethink the 2nd stanza - that the subject's claim that he wore no mask to hide behind - perhaps it is his way of saying the drama he participated in as described in the 1st stanza, was really his expression of the 'nothingness' he hid inside. I sound convoluted and strange - but this is such an enigmatic and strangely provocative piece.  
 
You left me thinking, pj, again... 
 
Mia :roll

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