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Dark and Light
By grace
25 August 2008
And now for something completely different. . .Laughing

DARK AND LIGHT

Treacle darkness coats the leaves,
on gnarled branches ancient born
and sleeves the trunk of mighty oak
whose roots descend on creeping quest.
The path is lost, the way is blind,
Orion stumbles, stars extinct,
yet overhead a screeching owl
defies the black and carves the air.

Ruby wound, horizon born,
bleeds to gold in eastern hope.
A bird extols relief and joy
with trilling voice, from lofty perch.
Blackened threat melts slow to blue,
light in triumph claims the day,
while trembling dew  drops soft to green,
as life is stirred on thirsty quest.

In a circle life revolves
where light and dark are seamless match,
down through eons past and new,
through fear and celebration both,
a rolling revelation. . .
gift of birth and price of death,
of roaring storm and tranquil sun,
rejoicing in a history
of challenge met and battles won.

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Written by Artemis (6 comments posted) 25th August 2008
There are some lovely phrases and images here, of which 'treacle darkness' is my favourite and a great opener.  

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 25th August 2008
Yes, I agree. You have painted some inspiring images here Pam. I also like the feeling of being carried along in time: "down through eons past and new both, a rolling revelation" etc. Life really is a never ending stream carrying us all along on the tide. I feel that also.

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 26th August 2008
Artemis and Josie, 
 
thank you both very much indeed for your thoughtful and generous comments, I'm so pleased you dnjoyed this, 
 
sincerely, Pamx

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 27th August 2008
It's funny, but today I had lunch in a restaurant called: 
The Treacle Mine.  
I was quite startled to see the word in your work, especially as this is my first visit since March! 
 
It's not a word we hear often these days, and I only use Black Treacle in my curries. 
 
Wonderful poem, Grace, you have a real talent.

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