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The girl with short hair
By chufflebinger
25 August 2008

This is the first draft of a poem im working on
any suggested improvements would be help
Thank you


His pint glass was empty
his first of the night
his pint glass resembles this point in his life

He respected the barman's pouring skills
but he kept himself quiet
the rest of the place was nothing like silence

By his third pint he was joined
a feeling in the air
he became attracted to the girl with short hair

He asked her a question
she replied with 'yes please'
she was the most amazing thing he had ever seen

He payed the barman
Her drink arrived
his pint glass filled up over the night

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