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I cannot wait..

By JininyC

27 August 2008

I cannot wait to see you
yet you've never seen my face
I cannot wait to hold you
yet you've never been embraced

I cannot wait to kiss you
yet you've never felt my lips
I cannot wait to guide you
Yet you've never even tripped

I cannot wait to touch you
Yet you've never felt a thing
I cannot wait to rock you
Yet you've never heard me sing

I cannot wait to hear you
Yet you've never made a sound
I cannot wait to take you out
Yet you've never felt the ground

I cannot wait to watch you
Yet you've never used your eyes
I cannot wait to smile at you
Yet you've never laughed or cried

I cannot wait to love you
Yet you've never felt a heart
I cannot wait to meet you
Yet we've never been apart

I cannot wait to teach you
The experiences to be had
I cannot wait to see you child
and for you to meet your dad.

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 28th August 2008

I know this particular sentiment has been said before but that is no reason why it shouldn't be said again, especially when it said so well.
I liked the repetition, it added to the drama and the emotional intensity.
One of the stand out lines for me:-
"I cannot wait to meet you
Yet we've never been apart"
That vividly expresses one of the odd emotions of pregnancy. Sometimes there is a great line in a poem that makes you look at the poem in a different way and elevates the work.
I did think the rest of it worked well and was sensitively expressed.
jane

Written by JininyC (13 comments posted) 28th August 2008

Thanks Jane, is greatly appreciated.

Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 28th August 2008

Your love (and excitement) come through - for that alone, a success. Not a style of poetry I usually enjoy - but that is just personal preference.

All the best. How long to go?

Phil

Congratulations
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 28th August 2008

I agree with Phil that your love and excitement absolutely whines through this and having the gift of a child must be one of the most precious things. I've just had two for the day and there has not been one minute of that time when I would have preferred to be with someone else. So you have your delight extending far beyond 9 months as well as frustrations sometimes. I think that being a parent is also a big learning process for an adult too.

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 28th August 2008

Ooooh - Shines through. What a shame that S is so near to w. Shining or whining - congratulations again and I loved your poem.

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